Everwriter, The Reader

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6/22/2017

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7/11/2017 10:57 PM

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I'm an old man who writes.

Big whoop.

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Something Happened To Bitsy
unpublished

Keep in mind, this is my first. There will probably misspellings, grammar errors, etc. Some criticism is appreciated so I can do better. >=]


Recent Posts

Hello fellow homo sapiens on 7/10/2017 9:55:54 PM

That was The Year We Made Contact!

(Sorry, I couldn't resist!)


First Story seeking advice on 7/10/2017 9:29:32 PM

"Sounds like a pretty straightforward scenario"

Watch the movie, Drugstore Cowboy, to see that isn't always the case.

And I would follow up your advice, which is great, with meaningful and insightful choices. Also, when writing something like this, always make sure most sentences have an immediacy, so the player feels the tension in the story.


Memento on 7/10/2017 9:19:45 PM

"Given you'd be taking future actions first which would have been influenced by past actions you hadn't taken yet, I don't see how it'd be possible"

This is a case of effect before cause. I believe it could be done, but the author would have to keep track of which divergent ending the player chose to start with. Off the top of my head, using variables and a few finite state machines could potentially keep track and directly influence character/story states. However, a lot of railroading would probably need to happen. But I can see it as possible. Improbable anyone would take the time to do it, but possible.


Dividing Time on 7/10/2017 9:13:10 PM

Well, A. is confirmed. I'm going to shoehorn it into the contest. A hero - in this case - can be many things. I believe it can work!


"what would probably be the twist in the story isn't known by the description you gave"

The strange thing is: Everyone knows she is missing, but they do not care. Not her parents, teachers, friends, except for the player's character. The twist(s) is/are already worked out, but it's a secret - so you'll have to read it to find out! :)


Round 2!!! on 7/10/2017 9:02:31 PM

I say maricon everytime I hear someone yell out gringo!... Makes certain types embarrassed, knowing foriegn words like that!

However, I like yelling at the spanish in japanese sometimes, just to fuck with em!


BZ's Summer Slam Contest! on 7/10/2017 8:54:44 PM

Well, butter my toast and call me Robert E. Lee! I do believe you are correct! ;D


Summer Slam Bragging & Bitching thread on 7/10/2017 12:17:55 AM

Okay, I rolled the dice. I'm in.


BZ's Summer Slam Contest! on 7/10/2017 12:16:03 AM

Someone here told me I could go in at 25, so I wager 25 if that's okay with you. :)

(However, if that does something bad to my standing, then nevermind...)

 


Poetry Prompts - Week 11 on 7/6/2017 8:36:41 PM

True Love, Doth Grant:

When I was twenty-one,
there was a girl whose fun,
was sudden, and much violent -
and through beauty match-ed talent,
was still a whore,
and such a bore.

Though at time's lengthy embrace,
my stupidity lost face -
where lusts borne from on high,
in my car she did sigh,
and admitted her disgust
if ever admit my lust.

She would boot me in the face
and have me share her disgrace,
by lying about my size
and showing off her white thighs,
to her father
who would bother -

to shoot me.

 

(I like Pope because he can do things I cannot. However, as far as Vogon Poetry goes - I ROCK!) cool


Dividing Time on 7/6/2017 8:15:58 PM

Okay, here is the new run down:

A has 15 votes,

B has 7,

and all the rest combined, has 1 vote! (I down voted a couple by 0.05 multiple times!)

So, A has the lead...

 

"Hey, option B sounds like a brilliant idea! "

Yeah, yeah.. I remember AOL, just say Mee To next time! ;P /jk