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Magic Schools.

8 years ago

So, I'm still struggling to find my muse for Magick Academy. Is there anything anyone here would particularly wish / hope for in a "magic" school sim?

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8 years ago

Well, I would like to see my character possibly have to sneak out of his dorm to investigate something without getting caught by teachers/ guards/ whatever. That could be a suspenseful moment. Though I'm not exactly sure what you meant. We're you asking for suggestions for something that could happen in the story?

P.S. Just out of curiosity, what guild paths are you working on atm?

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8 years ago

More like... just anything. Mechanics, events, items, relationships, choices, exc, anything people would like to see.

"Guild paths"?

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8 years ago

Like Rakdos or something. You said that this game would be so huge because you could get to choose which guild you were in. I was wondering which of the guilds you are currently working on right now.

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8 years ago

... This game that I'm talking about has nothing to do with Magic The Gathering. o.0 That is an entirely different series of games.

I said this one would be huge because you'd be able to pick your elemental talent, gender, and several other aspects of your MC's life.

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8 years ago

Oh. I see now. Kinda just assumed they were related.

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8 years ago

Naw. I don't know when I'll work on my MTG series right now. It's pretty low on the priority list.

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8 years ago
My dad tried to teach me how to play MTG when I was a kid. I wish I had paid more attention (and convinced him not to sell all of his cards).

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8 years ago

Decks are pretty easy to find in Hastings, Wal-mart, and various other places. You won't find the horribly broken combos of the past, but still.

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8 years ago
Challenges to reach advancement
A chance to fail and have to start a year over
A chance to get kicked out during the year
A chance to choose doing something that will get you kicked out and saving the world OR not
Learning new spells that then can be used in later challenges
Selection of a school of magick that affects your later choices

Is that the type of stuff you're looking for?

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8 years ago

Anything you guys would like to see. :P No specifics, just anything.

Good to know. Not sure about that fourth one, but everything else should be possible when I'm done.

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8 years ago
I think with that fourth one I'm looking more along the lines of a "Random" path that just takes you away from the magic school, but you save the world or something.

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8 years ago

Ah. The issue with that is the school (and your adventures in it / relationships made during your time there, exc) really is the focus here. I promise that you'll have plenty to do, though. After all, I made the majority of my first game in a single house. :P

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8 years ago

A demonic creature that offers you great power if you destroy the school/open a portal to Hell in the middle of it. 

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8 years ago

First of all, please do tell us why the character is having to go to mage school. What do people typically do after they graduate from mage school?

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8 years ago

Become mages.

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8 years ago

And what exactly does a mage do in this universe? How do they earn a living? Are there large firms of mages that people go to for magical consultation? Are mages reared for military use?

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8 years ago

The sequel, if it ever gets made, will focus on your career.

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8 years ago

Well, what does the character hope or expect to do after s/he gets out of school?

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8 years ago

I think I'm going to have it be more of a "this agency recruits you" sort of thing. But it's a little early to focus on that. The reason the character wants to go to this school varies depending on your initial choices about their background. In short, don't worry, it's on my mind. :P 

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8 years ago

Sorry. I didn't mean to imply that you didn't know what you were doing.

Moving on, I think it would be cool if one of your instructors forced you to pull a William Tell on (one of) your love interest(s), perhaps casting a magical shockwave with him/her as the epicenter, where being off by a millimeter could fry them.

Magic Schools.

8 years ago

Naw, I didn't think that. You make a good point, it's something that should be addressed. 

That is an interesting concept ... hmm. I'll have to remember that for student practical skill tests. 

 

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8 years ago

What is the average classroom setting like in "the academy"? I mean, I imagine it's not the traditional "blackboard and desks" classroom, but knowing what feel you are going for would be helpful in generating ideas.

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8 years ago
Perhaps a mysterious person (possibly from a guild of assassins or other faction) that you can meet during the storyline, who managed to sneak into the academy and contacts you? Then, (s)he asks you to do favors by stealing a requested item, sabotaging something, defeating a particular student, plant evidence, etc in school in exchange for rewards from the person, or maybe get to join the 'faction' (s)he is in during one of the endings?

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8 years ago

Um ... I really don't think that's going to work. Thanks anyway.

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8 years ago
How about a roommate? At first, you meet someone, male or female based on your gender or interest option. (S)he seems a bit selfish at first. You'll get to have a mock battle with him/her in one of the tests or something.

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8 years ago

xD Every version of the MC has three roommates.

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8 years ago
I meant each roommate should have different opinions about the MC. One might hate, one might like, and the other might be... quiet.

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8 years ago

>_> Yes. They all have different personalities, attitudes, likes, dislikes, exc. That is part of the mechanics of the game. They respond to you differently depending on your background, and it's supposed to be harder to get them to ally with you depending on their initial impression of you and how you treat them afterward. Some of them can become your enemies and you can fight them in tournaments ... xD

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8 years ago
Sounds like it'll be fun. I remember that we can choose our element, right? Are we limited to one element, or can we master them all?

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8 years ago

Drug-busting.

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8 years ago

Damnit Kiel, I'm serious. Drugs are a serious problems in today's youth, especially high-school agers, and just ignoring it for your magic-dormitory school is a mixture of wishful thinking and ignoring realism. Now let my character get high (and then get kicked out if caught :P)

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8 years ago

But he has to think of all sorts of magic fantasy drugs for that kind of thing. They have to have Mad-Maxy fantasy names, too, like Ragevile, Sleeping Tar, Bitefrog, Freeze Rocks, Knuckle Sap, Wangraiser, etc...

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8 years ago

Well, yeah. Kiel's a creative guy, certainly creative enough to make names for various magical steroids. :P. Could have fun with it haha.

I mean, Harry-Potter. These kids were 17 by the end of it. Drugs in gradeschool are surprisingly prevalent nowadays (source says 27.2%), and I can imagine in a competitive magic-world they'd be even more so. And, uh, besides the potentially hilarious aspect, finding out your friend got on the quidditch team by 'Alchemizing' is a pretty cool plot point follow up on. Dunno.

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8 years ago

There could even be terrible "Say No!" style-ads about it.  "Hey kid, wanna try this Ogre-bollock brew? You grow 2 feet taller in a day!" "Heck no, shady alleyway man! Ogre testicles are for losers!"

There could even be backlash from various fantasy race communities if the ingredients come from semi-sentient beings. Especially if there were ads calling out Ogre-bollocks.

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8 years ago

xD ... I will admit, this is a funny concept. I'll have to think about it.

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8 years ago

Magic schools have been pretty drug out with Harry Potter and Percy Jackson, etc.

Don't make it like them.

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8 years ago

It isn't like Hogwarts and ... as for Percy Jackson, what magic school? That was a magic summer camp.

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8 years ago

It's the same concept- go here to learn how to use your special abilities and drama and stuff happens.

Ehhhh

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8 years ago
A school where we actually have grades that we earn. Don't have to make quizzes or anything, but our choices should affect our grades and ranking in the classroom. Gain benefits for getting a high score in certain areas (benefits = unique choices/dialogue with other characters).

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8 years ago

Grades are a thing. I've already been working on a system to make an over-all grade for your year, then an over-all grade for your performance for all four years. There will be a valedictorian status for graduation if the latter is high enough, exc.

There will be tests, and the yearly tournaments also count as part of your grade. If your overall grade for the year drops too low, you fail your classes and lose the game. I haven't fully considered what bonuses you'll get for keeping your grade high. Perhaps relationship bonuses with "smart" students / "lazy" students, a reward from your respective guardians (monetary) and perhaps some extra items available at the shop which can only be purchased by "exceptional" students.

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8 years ago

SHUT UP AND MAKE THIS HAPPEN!!!

I like it already.

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8 years ago

Also, one big incentive for relationships? You have to have a high enough status with at least one possible ally. It does not matter who, it just needs to be another student in the same year as you. If you do not, you cannot participate in the tag-team tournament during one of the later years because everyone will refuse to be your partner. :P So you automatically fail the year.

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8 years ago
Uhh...not sure if I like that concept. Maybe if there was a had a markedly more difficult or morally ambiguous way to squeek by?

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8 years ago

You want morally ambiguous? Bribe people to like you. xD

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8 years ago

Well, damn it, Kiel. You didn't tell us we had that option. XD

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8 years ago

:P You never asked, haha.

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8 years ago

Well, when people talk about forming relationships, they generally aren't referring to bribery. I feel misled and want my money back.

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8 years ago

xD I did say once that it was like Harvest Moon. You totally bribe the townsfolk in those games.

And you can form sincere relationships with them, it's just that actually being best buds ( / romantically involved) is not required. There will be benefits to it, though.
 

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8 years ago

I don't recall bribery. I recall people screaming at me for a solitary golden fence post. \

Okay. I do like the sound of that.

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8 years ago

I distinctly remember feeding women / giving them flowers to get them to marry me, and giving crops to old people to get recipes for better food. And, as far as I remember, the townsfolk liking you and your farm was important in at least a couple games, or you'll get kicked out... though, it's been a while.

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8 years ago
"I distinctly remember feeding women / giving them flowers to get them to marry me"

I don't see how that's different from reality :P

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8 years ago

:P The food part, I remember from real life, but that's because my partner could burn cereal and I actually enjoy cooking. Neither of us has ever given the other plant life of any kind. Besides, yes, bribery is a real world concept ... what's your point? xD

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8 years ago
As long as we get the dick option of bullying some weak kid into being our partner, I'm completely fine with that, haha.

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8 years ago

:P Hey, you have to make -someone- happy enough to progress anywhere in Through Time.

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8 years ago
True enough, but that was because that person would then become the focus of the story. No happy people = no focus = no story.

Though if the pair up to pass end up being more than a hit 'em and quit 'em thing, that could be cool.

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8 years ago

Well ... and this is me being horrifically ambitious ... I wanted to try a Mass Effect approach to the sequel. Don't ask me how, I haven't worked out all the kinks from the idea, and heaven only knows if I'll finish this game this century, let alone the next game. But theoretically, your choices in this one would mean something long-term in the next.

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8 years ago
How do you plan on moving all that data over to the next game?

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8 years ago

Password system, natch. I can't think of another way. (If you can, I'd love to hear it. Edit: Also, dammit, I told you not to ask! xD)

I'm trying to think of the least painful way to apply the concept / easiest way to condense your accomplishments. 

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8 years ago
Password system is really the only way. However there may be creative ways to use HTML/JavaScript in order for the player to not have to click through 20 pages of numbers. Like a textbox that you parse.

You could also make larger number sections. So rather than 20 pages of clicking 1 number, it's 5 pages of selecting from a group of 4 numbers.

Magic Schools.

8 years ago
Grades are only about the average, not individual classes though?

Extra circular activities could be a reward as well. I prefer rewards that are "you earn things that are unique", over "you get more X!".

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8 years ago

In the interest of not making it too complex for myself, yes.

xD You want activities with extra circles? I'll see what I can do. :P
 

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8 years ago

I second that.

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8 years ago

I'm of the firm belief that magic should not be taught in the typical Harry Potter fashion. The story and lore of the game becomes much more interesting if mages are taught in a sensei-student sort of way, where the master introduces concepts, basics, (and occassional bodily injury, just for the yuks) and then plays his/her students off against each other or issues different tests and challenges, making them learn all the powers and rules for themselves, rather than providing us all with a wizard-themed info dump as it becomes plot-relevant, because the former is a billion times more engaging. As long as it wouldn't fuck with your narrative, of course.

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8 years ago

Uh ... you came into a thread about a magical school to say that magic should not be taught in schools? xD

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8 years ago

It can be taught in schools, but Levitation 101 should be "Alright, kids, now that you know the basics, I'm going to be pulling the tables out from underneath you. The last three of you who aren't touching the floor get a sticker!" Enchantment should be "These are the magic things, this is what they do. You have until the end of class to make this puppy start shitting bacon." Severus Snape just standing in front of the class saying "Open your books to page 394 and I'll provide you with the exposition now." should be avoided at all costs. It's been done before several times already and it's not an engaging or immersive way for a reader to learn about the world of magic. Maybe it's fine if you're reading a book, but this is a CYOA. The reader should be sucked into the world with a jolt.

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8 years ago

Practical application instead of massive exposition. Yes, I've been thinking about the appropriate ways of doing that for various forms of magic.

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8 years ago
Can they have pets? Like secret ones you stuff in a sock to prevent the head teacher finding out. Like.. Squirrels.

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8 years ago

Yes, it can be like the Owls in Harry Potter except with squirrels. Imagine hundreds upon hundreds of squirrels scurrying around the hallways at all times! Kiel, make this happen! /\

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8 years ago

>_> Familiars are already a planned game mechanic. Why are you asking me for squirrels when I'm already planning to give you people imps, chimeras, baby dragons, foxes, and cobras?

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8 years ago

I call dibs on a dragon! And a squirrel. Squirrels are cute. :3

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8 years ago

xD I'll consider including squirrels, then.

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8 years ago

Oooo! How 'bout this little squirrel? 

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8 years ago

O_o That's more of a pint-sized chimera, isn't it? Cute for a fire-breathing, flying, tree-rat though.

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8 years ago

I thought that a chimera had the head and front paws of a lion, a body/backlegs and horns of a goat, and a tail of a snake? Constantly warring with itself; the lion wanting to eat the goat, the goat wanting to step on the snake, and the snake wanting to bite the lion? Right? Or am I thinking of something else?

Edit; like this.

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8 years ago
Chimera is just a term for an animal made by combining other animals.

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8 years ago

And people! (As a human chimera is a real life thing, even if it is an extreme genetic rarity.)

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8 years ago
Well, people are animals, biologically speaking (sorry, the evil semanticist side of me is emerging). But, you're talking about when one paternal twin engulfs another in utero, right?

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8 years ago

Well, that's true, if one's classifying... still, people do tend to mean our furry, slithering, hoofed, or otherwise non-human friends when using the word, so I assumed as much. And yep! 

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8 years ago

Oh, I know; it just drives me a little nuts. It's like when people misuse the words "decimate", "sentience", and "inoculate". It makes me want to rub my face against a cheese grater.

But, yay, I feel smart now.

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8 years ago

That's one of the legendary chimera's two main flavors, I believe; yes.

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8 years ago

The other flavor being?

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8 years ago

The pink monster from Earthbound.

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8 years ago

Earthbound? Chimera? Oh, you mean this thing?

Wait, no, the one in Earthbound had a little birdie that stood on its head.

There we go.

Video-games: fucking our expectations since 1972.

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8 years ago

I commend you for including the noble fox in your game. We will not let you down, unless we hear loud noises or someone offers us food or we die.

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8 years ago
Because squirrels are adorable and magic and tiny and you can put them in your pocket and they'll peep out like a tiny little bobblehead. They can convey messages and they can even be magical. With like a horn and stuff. Imagine like this super badass post apocalyptic guy carrying a squirrel.
Like that, but with magic. And fire. And destruction.

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8 years ago
You're online pretty often. Do you have any problem trying to sleep, or do you leave hour browser on? I think you're leaving your browser on.

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8 years ago

I know I've already answered this question. >.> And it isn't related to the thread in the slightest.

I never log out of CYS, and I have a habit of leaving both/either my phone/computer on even when I sleep. On top of that, I have insomnia and I'm accustomed to working graveyard shift, so I like having something to read / look at if I start to get drowsy.

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8 years ago
And I have no idea why I tend to make questions while I already know the answers. Maybe I forgot, or sometimes, just to see how people react.

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8 years ago

Maybe non-human students, like angels and other magical/mythical/heavenly(?) beings. Humans would still go there, but not only humans.

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8 years ago

I've thought about this, actually. I haven't decided yet. Thank you for the suggestion.

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8 years ago

Is Magick Academy going to be set in the same universe as GoLaD and TOW? I know there is sufficient reason to believe it isn't, but I want to be sure.

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8 years ago

Nah. Not related. Or if they are, it'll be in that "second cousin's niece's great-aunt's husband's dog twice removed" sort of way. While I've established inter dimensional traveling as a thing in GOLAD's universe(s), and apparently a thing I like abusing the hell out of, it's very unrelated to the plot of M.A. and Vidia is from your run-of-the-mill evil coven, not a school. Of course, I wouldn't put it past me to slip in a cameo of some kind for one character or another...  

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8 years ago

Is magic and the use thereof fundamentally similar to how it was in the GoLaD/TOW universe?

In GoLaD, you hinted that one's ability to use magic was related to their ability to remember and recall large amounts of information.

Going off of that, I could see some sort of magical spelling bee (no pun intended), in which students have to execute high level spells back to back with no reference.

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8 years ago

Magic in M.A. is more about genetics. You're either born with the ability to use magic or you aren't, and it tends to manifest as a talent for a specific element among six. I plan for the MC to be able to learn multiple non-elemental spells, have a brewing / spell creation mechanic, and items to channel your power effectively for special uses, but practical application classes would be focused on honing one's innate talents... and, you know, not burning down neighborhoods or flooding cities.

That is an interesting idea, though, hehe. I do like it. We'll see, a lot of this is subject to possible changes because I'm still working on the characters than the actual game-play.

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8 years ago

So, it's just a bunch of children with unusual innate abilities going to school for no reason other than to gain some vague mastery over their skills, with no real post-academic goals of any kind?

Real-life schools have clubs devoted to students wishing to pursue certain career paths and colleges hold career fairs. I know you've already made up your mind on what the MC will do after graduation, but seeing a demand for mages and different possible career paths for mages would do a lot in the way of separating this story from, say, X-men, Harry Potter, and Percy Jackson and the Olympians.

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8 years ago

I did specify that I was referring to only one specific type of class, not to all of them.

As I said, I do plan to address their potential futures.

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8 years ago

Yeah, sorry. I forgot the extent to which we discussed that point.

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8 years ago

Have you seen a game called "Academagia" Is a very good text game and It could give you some ideas (I hope XD)