Your story is pretty much completely unfinished and lacks any sense of polish. I don't believe you even attempted to proofread it. First off, almost every sentence begins without capitalization. This is a huge issue. You also have numerous words that appear to be capitalized or bolded for no real reason whatsoever. The very first sentence is a run on sentence, the second sentence has numerous spelling errors (faceing, horrers) and the second page has one sentence and no links. It is also filled with poor grammar.
What am I supposed to be reading? You seem to lack the basic fundamentals of writing a story, or writing anything really. Now, you could just be a troll. But I'm willing to give you the benefit of the doubt. Work on your grammar, spelling, and general grasp of the English language before writing a story. Because what you've written so far is honestly bad.
