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The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Follow four different characters through four different interwoven storylines that encompass the massive world of Corvayyen. Your journey will take you through: Sweeping mountains, massive strongholds, eternal plains, gargantuan oceans and the deepest and darkest depths of the mortal realm.
That would be the game description, its going to take me quite awhile to write.  Ive done the first chapter of one of the characters and I'm having tons of fun.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Oh yeah, and anyone who would like to play the first chapter, talk to me :)

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Sounds pretty cool.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago

Hey
Nice to meet you
and thank you very much!

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Hey, that sounds like it will be a lot of fun to play! Do the four characters interact with each other / get around together, like an adventuring party, or is it like different 'chapters' deal with a different character's situation and events?

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago

(Wow Im talking with Tsmpaul :D)

Both actually.  They'll start off apart in they're own worlds but some of them will meet and some of them will actually join forces.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
That was really amazing.  I hope you continue.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago

30 Pages / 60 Links / 2 Chapters / Lots of Fun!

Im loving this!.  Ive decided that its going to be broken into seperate parts.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
62 Pages / 132 Links / 3 Chapters / Bunches of fun.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
I'm a bit bored, so I decided to find out that you have a higher amount of links compared to pages than I have. JJJ does it too, I don't see how everybody can include so many links.

It looks like a good storygame, Darknuth. I look forward to playing it.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Would you like to play it now?

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
I'm fine, I'll wait until the release date. Thanks for the offer though.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
I'll play it. what's the hyperlink?

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Sent to you via pm, thanks rommel

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
It looks very good, but you seem to have blocked the roads leading north and south in the second introduction. I like the theme of a company exploiting it's workers, abusing them wheher they get 100%, 50% or 20% or the jobs done...

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
Blocked the roads? No..  Or hold on what do you mean?

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
It jumps back to the end of the first introduction, where the avatar gets yelled at by the foreman.

The Rivers of Gorbank

16 years ago
That didnt happen to me.  I playtested it ten or elven times.