So, I checked it out and I must say that I really love the concept - especially because I was able to assemble an all female party hehe. I hope you clean it up a bit and finish it - I'd love to see where it goes from here!
As for what you can do to improve - well, there are some small and big issues. Hopefully you will find the advice helpful ---
1. There are a number of small grammatical errors (which a proofreader can help you to spot) - for example, on the first page you omitted 'you' from a sentence and used 'goes' instead of 'go'.
2. You really need to break up your text walls - at least in half each. Find a logical place where the focus of the sentence changes or just throw a paragraph break in the middle of each.
3. Consider creating a mirror page for the First Page Scene. In other words, once you leave the First Page - do not go back to it. Have the links send you to a page that is the same but comes in from the perspective of having already been there. Like "There are still a few places you need to go. You continue your search for members of your party" or the like, rather than right back to the start of the story. You can also do this on the same page if you want, but then you'll need to use Scripting to tell it what text to show at the start and then after you leave the page for the first time.
4. On the 'Leaving' page, your link blows up the game. It is probably because you tried to make the link point to a page with scripting and left out the '@' - for example: $DEST := @P100
