Where's the Reddit surge when you need it
Please go outside and seek sex.
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If there's anything I hate even more than reading, it's being told encouraged to read!
On a serious note: Will actually personally messaged me to read his storygame and I told him that I'd get on that this week. I've read a bit of it and it seems good, so I'll be looking forward to reading the entirety of his writing.
Lol my algebra classroom had more people than this list.
Not counting the dropouts
How dare you forget @Killerainbow
Hey boss, what can I do ya for?
I feel bad now, I can't believe you're just gonna guilt trip me like that. Fine.
Wait wait, I'm making a story game for my class right now but I promise to read a bunch of new games and rate rather than just guest everything.
Fair enough, and you're for sure right I honestly hate everything I've written so far because I literally suck at writing, but it's worth 180 points and I have a D right now. On the flip side, I'll be introducing my English class to this site which will automatically give them +100 cool. I feel like it's a good trade. Anyway, I got 4 days to do this I can read one story right quick but it's gotta get done.
10, sophomore year.
Also, why am I slightly intimidated by you when I don't even know what you look like?
In retrospect, I am no where near ready for such an undertaking. Sorry to disappoint, xd.
However, I will mention that this thread seems to have done quite a lot, so I hope people keep the importance of readers in everyone's minds. Some of the reviews I managed to look at are also surprisingly good, so keep it up y'all.
I've been meaning to start writing some "real" reviews (i.e. bust out at least a two paragrapher). Is the "Top 5 Storygames in need" section of the homepage accurate?
Feel free to also post a short list here and I'll get crackin'
The Lost Realm by me.
Shameless advertising time.
OK, I have officially started edutaining myself (compliments of Will11). Lost Realm is next in line!
Any other shout-outs?
I don't need reviews on my latest story at all.
Dark Nights (Be sure to write a lengthy comment so I can knock Mistery's gibberish off the featured comments list)
Are you very sure? :3
Wait! hold up!! Did you just say Unicorn? I like Unicorns!!! :D
But... I was working on my very own story... ):
I've already started it, and I plan on reviewing it once I read the mutineer path.
I can say in advance that unless I come across pages of random numbers, the rating will be high. :)
Okay, I read it and then practically verbally fellated Will in the comments.
Now I must go and save a kitty out of a tree. If you are feeling generous, wish me luck and well wishes in advance, thank you.
Kitty in a tree? God save the queen!
Personally, I would already have read and rated (but not necessarily fully reviewed) a lot more stories if the points were more substantial. As it is (i.e. 1 point for what might take me one to four hours of reading), it actually discourages rating stories. It's as if you are saying, "what you are doing is insignificant to us" rather than "This is what we want you to do the most." Probably 10 points per rating/review would be a lot more motivating (and appropriate).
The way to judge whether or not a reward is "overpowered" is based on its influence on behavior.
Right now, the reward for rating/reviewing a story is not overpowered.
"The issue isn't the amount of points so much that most users don't care about them at all"
Agreed. For the majority of readers, the points are not overpowered (i.e. they are worthless). Also agreed, awarding more points wouldn't fix the issue as it relates to them (so there goes my "10 point" quick fix)
You should assume that I (and all of us who care about this site) are actually reading the books when you decide how many points to award for rating them. Saying that it amounts to "just writing a few words" is not an accurate reflection of the actual time involved in reading the work (and "just a few words" would not get me a feature or a commendation anyway).
Publishing a book should definitely get more points than it does currently. It would be great if that, as well as the points earned for a rating a game, were somehow tied to the length of the work itself.
As a related aside, I don't think points would be enough to motivate me to write a "real" review (which would take me hours). For that, I would want some assurance of receiving equivalently detailed notes for my work-in-progress. I have made that offer publicly; but, so far, only Wibbons has taken me up on it (and I think we both found the exchange to be very useful).
Personally, I prefer a private exchange of "full notes" as I feel freer when outside the public eye (and I suspect many others feel the same), especially when giving or receiving criticism, which is often the most useful).
Posting this to signify that I finally stopped editing my prior post (so it is "ready to read").
As you can see, my "best" work really does take some time; and, even then, might contain the occasional orphaned bracket. :")
Mine is 100K according to the site, and 75K in real life (i.e. as a word document). The deal would be that I read and send you notes first, then I get notes back of similar effort/time (so, less detailed for sure).
I'm not sure what the correct terminology would be for what I am looking for. In real life, two of my friend are writers (one professional and one of them of the "writes great feature-length screenplays but none of them have sold yet" variety) and we have been exchanging "notes" (we read each other's work... usually just a "once-through "... and then share what we like, what we don't like, and ideas on how to make it better). For my book, it would take a long time just to do that (probably 3 hours to read it straight through, and an additional 2 hours to read the two main alternate branches), but I wouldn't mind someone reading it, quitting 2 hours in, and then telling me where and why they quit (I think that would be really really useful actually). Wibbons just read the branch that appealed the most (which was totally fine with me, and useful info to boot).
I don't need punctuation/spelling stuff (i.e. "copyediting/proofreading"?). I agree that would be way too onerous, and I'll probably pay someone to copyedit it for real once it's done.
I've been asking for "beta-reading", but I embarrassed to say I still don't know exactly what that term means. Just to clarify, I will read your work (including all the branches) and tell you what I like, what I don't like, and give a few very detailed suggestions (with some rough-drafted examples) of how I think it could be better. Then, you would do the same for me (with the understanding that you are allowed to quit reading mine early if and when you decide it sucks, and/or you feel like you have paid me back already in kind). At this point, with my friends, I often just ask for specific sections to be read (i.e. the parts I revamped the most since their last read).
Mizal, please stop referring to our visitors as "dumb-ass kids" and "forum-avoiding nobodies". We are trying to court them for god's sake!
Aww! So that's means I, not a dumb ass kid? Because in truth I'm really 18 years old so dumb ass grows up well be more suited to call me as.
Damn. If I knew the same author of the Jesse James story, made another story, I would've been on that shit so hard I would've died from dysentery by now! Thanks for getting the word out!
Ok, so I finally just wrote my first-ever "legit" public review (for The Lost Realm). Fingers crossed that the gods reward me? Next up is Dark Knights, then Unicorns, then whoever else specifically requests my services (non-requesters will just get my normal short reviews, according to the rules I am clearly just inventing as I go along). Will11, in retrospect, I probably owe you a "legit" review given the quality of your work, so I'm gonna loop back to it after I play with the unicorns.
Dark Nights "legit" reviewed, time for Unicorns.
There really is some performance anxiety in the writing of public reviews. For example, I can't help but cringe when I give criticism/advice (especially publicly). I hope it's not coming off too harsh/like "I'm an expert" (which I am not). Feel free to reprimand me if that's the case (but, please be nice about it). It is so much easier to gauge these things when I speak with a friend (or patient, for that matter) in person.
Personally, I'd rather that even the slightest forms of criticism be sent to me in private (so I can cry in a corner and then delete /repress the memory of it altogether a few days later).
Way to steal my thunder. :-( That preemptively encapsulates my feeling about this unicorn story I'm about to start reading.
As a fragile baby, I now need to fear lynching.
One of us was clearly wrong. :-p
What happens if you have suddenly decided that a story is so bad that you can’t make it past the first page?
Ok, just reviewed your story (and wrote way too much, but because I was too lazy to stop/make it tighter LOL)
"Test" was my experiment to see if I could obsessively re-write my comment (as per usual), but alas...
I will have to forever live with the typos and poor imitation of your "bitchy" voice. :'(
OK. I'm all out of requests for "legit" reviews.
If you want one, please let me know here (or PM me and I'll send it to you privately).
This has been very fun (and I am learning a lot by writing these), so thanks Bucky for the kick in the butt.
Female... Also I appreciate the comment, but if you're only saying that to me cuz Seto is my friend, minus cool!
Good call. :-)
Okay, I just read the Mutiny on the Bounty game. It was a fun. I just think the author should get a St. Martin's Handbook because I kept running into a lot of mechanics problems. I also thought there needed to be more detailed descriptions. Still, it was a fun romp.
Fun story. Just realized (after writing my review) that her style is very Hemingway. Crisp and to the point (in a really good way) - especially the action sequences. Your advice to her was on point. Basically, it should be longer/more full and also more well-thought-out in certain places (but not wordier... the amount of wordiness is perfect).
Huh? Henshaw's review was written after mine... But, for me, I mean the spareness of the descriptions. You see the bad guy... next sentence he is cut in half. Boom. Not too many sentences and yet a lot is going on. That's where I got the feel from...
Oh.. I see... you think I copied the idea/saw his review... No. My post (also) was before Henshaw's review. But, I think it's cool that we saw the same thing. Wish I could describe it better. Something along the lines of "very few words/sentences between the actions" maybe?