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9 years ago

So, the old thread was getting pretty long so I've started a new one. I should be able to get back to writing now since I think I've figured out a way to keep Brasus in the game. Will probably add the new characters later. ^_^

Price of Freedom Updates 2

9 years ago

I guess my goal for today is to write a complete plan for everything that happens in the first part of the story including all the choices you're given, all the conversations you have and everything like that.

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9 years ago

Sounds like you're writing an epic. I THINK IT WILL BE EXCELLENT

(I think you need to tone down the giant text just a little) - Seth

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9 years ago

Seth is a great guy.

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9 years ago

He does the best edits... Especially when they involve sandwiches ^_^

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9 years ago

And catgirls.

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9 years ago

It's a shame that the thread no longer exist for the non-moderators. 

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9 years ago

Remember when I thought the thread was actually about sandwiches and I posted a recipe. XD

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9 years ago

I think Seth's recipe was the best. Dam, that was sexy. :D

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9 years ago

Seth writes some good food porn. He should write a kinky recipe book called 50 Shades of Buffet ^_^

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9 years ago

Indeed. I know I would definitely read it. xD

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9 years ago

All food porn is good food porn. 

EDIT: Make sure to add sausage! 

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9 years ago

Yay! Brasus gets to stay. :D

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9 years ago

... devil

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9 years ago

Well, I haven't written anything for a few days for various reasons (mostly because I'm either too busy or too lazy.) But yeah, I'm back, and I'm feeling pretty unmotivated today, so honestly my goal for the day is just to write... Something. cheeky

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9 years ago

If you manage to somehow not accomplish this, you should feel bad.

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9 years ago

... Well, I did write something, so... Yey, I think? cheeky

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9 years ago

"So he picked up his sword and-"

Yup. I wrote something today. xD

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9 years ago

Oh...Briar. crying

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9 years ago

Something is better than nothing! ^_^

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9 years ago

Unless nothing is better than something! VvV

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9 years ago

Neo ExDeath would beg to differ.

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9 years ago

I wrote something today as well... Story's plodding along very slowly, but at least it's moving again. cheeky

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9 years ago

Like a tortoise! xD 

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9 years ago

Yarp! laugh

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9 years ago

Decided that instead of doing my writing exercises today, I'd just get some work done on POF. Nearly finished chapter 5. ^_^

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9 years ago

Wrote some more of chapter 5. I decided to expand on it with a big lecture about the importance of dying an honorable death... And I'm starting to worry myself with how long I seem to go between updates. cheeky

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9 years ago

Nice. So excited to read it.  On a completely unrelated note, where did you find your demon Little Bo Peep picture for your profile? 

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9 years ago

... First of all, why is she a demon? Second, I drew her. >.<

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9 years ago

I envey her slender frame.

Dunno. Very well drawn. I just find it... off-putting.

But you're a great writer AND artist? No fair! I'm filing a complaint... with... freaking.... God. Yeah, seems legit. 

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9 years ago

Everybody else said she was cute crying

And haha! ... Well I can't be that good an artist if people think my cute anime girl is a demon Little Bo Peep. cheeky

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9 years ago

 She's bloodthirsty cute. Don't worry! 

But the anime girl is reminiscent of Little Bo Peep. 

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9 years ago

She would make as a fine offering to Danaos in gaining his favor. She might have to lose the ribbon though, not that there is anything wrong with ribbons. wink

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9 years ago

Uhh... The character was supposed to be about 13 in this picture, just so you know. (Though I guess that probably wouldn't bother you, since you like showing your soft spot to whimpering boys.) cheeky

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9 years ago

Too far.... unh. Can't... get... out... of... shattered.... MIND! *jumps out office building* 

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9 years ago

Joke from the last thread.

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9 years ago

I don't care about the girl, it's that GODDAMN RIBBON I WANT>

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9 years ago

Back off bitch! It's mine! angry

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9 years ago

Not now, it's not. ;P

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9 years ago

So I figured that the writing exercises were distracting me too much, so I scrapped them for awhile. Been working on POF all day and finally got chapter 5 finished... Yey! ^_^

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9 years ago

... And looking over my notes, I've realized that it took me 18 days to finish one chapter... Considering I wrote the original Price of Freedom in two weeks, I'd say that's pretty bad. cheeky

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9 years ago

Just think of it as a marathon rather than a sprint. I can't imagine the pace of those two weeks would be sustainable over a longer period.

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9 years ago

Nope. I just get frustrated when I don't make any progress 'cos I'm worried I'll never get it finished. >.<

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9 years ago

Just do it in a one quick burst. When you have the time, put aside everything and write until your hand hurts. When that happens, write some more. Don't get distracted. Remember - distractions, like drugs, are bad. 

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9 years ago

That's kind of what I was doing yesterday (and what I plan on doing today). Only I've been setting it up with short writing shifts and small rewards... Like I'll write for an hour and then play a game for 5 minutes or something.

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9 years ago

You're exposing yourself to distractions. ^_^

But well, if you have the self control to just relax a few minutes by playing a game for only that small amount of time, then I guess you're good. Still - write like you have no tomorrow! 

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9 years ago

Yep! Distractions are fun ^_^

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9 years ago

If it helps, the deadline for the next competition is in three weeks. So if you want to enter the full version, it'd be best to hurry.

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9 years ago

Th IF comp? Nah, can't enter that with POF since I already entered the same game in another competition. cheeky

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9 years ago

Well I been typing away and while I was planning on getting about half of chapter 6 done, I only managed to finish the first part... But hey, at least it's something. ^_^

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9 years ago

*Throws rotten tomatoes at you*

-_- Nnnno! Nnnno! Not enough to satisfy me.

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9 years ago

Oh, what will it take to give you satisfaction? ;) 

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9 years ago

That's what she said. 

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9 years ago

Waa sad

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9 years ago

Don't do this to me Briar...you can't just leave me like this. crying

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9 years ago

Give him what he desires. ;)

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9 years ago

I'm back! Been on a course for a couple of weeks and so I haven't gotten anything done and I'm really out of practice. One the plus side, today I forced myself to write half a paragraph! ... ... ... It's something. cheeky

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9 years ago

Welcome back Briar!

Now write, write like your life depends on it, because your fans have gone rabid in the couple of weeks you've been gone. XD

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9 years ago

... Oh dear :(

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9 years ago

WOOHOOO! 

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9 years ago

Did you purposefully cut off the preview? sad

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9 years ago

Huh?

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9 years ago

If you put it in the url to see the sneak preview, it cuts it off during the first scene.

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9 years ago

Hmm, not sure why it does that.

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9 years ago

I love you Briar! *fanboy scream*

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9 years ago

Yes, yes, I am very wonderful. *Autographs Dan's helmet* ^_^

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9 years ago

*assasinates Briar with a sniper rifle*

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9 years ago

... sad

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9 years ago

That's for not writing enough to satisfy people, you tyrant! *leaps into crowd and sneaks away*

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9 years ago

And there goes another week without writing anything. Not sure how that happened...

Anyways, I'm gonna write something today! ... Not sure how much, but something. cheeky

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9 years ago

I know the feeling. Glad to see you feeling motivated, though. Good luck! I'll be trying to get some done today, too. :D

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9 years ago

Good luck, and be glad you didn't do what I just did recently. Accidently saved over like 15 pages that now need to be rewritten again!

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9 years ago

Ouch. 

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9 years ago

Damn. Sorry, man.
 

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9 years ago

It's not too bad, though I was going "NOOOOOO!" when it happened. Lol. I'm already through half of it and fortunately I recently posted a bit of my story in the Suzy thread so I can just copy/paste that bit.

Really have to pay extra attention to which version I'm saving when I'm backing up stuff up the flash drive though.

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9 years ago

... Wow, that sounds REALLY bad. I hate re-writing stuff >.<

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9 years ago

I have a story on the backburner that is like, 150ish pages, and I've rewritten the first 30ish at least twice now.

I just recently reread it, and I'm thinking I need to rewrite it again :(

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9 years ago

Thanks a lot for all the support guys! Unfortunately I only managed to write a paragraph again, but hopefully I'll be motivated to write more tomorrow. smiley

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9 years ago

WHAT!?!

Here I am almost FINISHED with the 15 pages I had to REWRITE and you only managed ONE paragraph?!!?!?!

*Catapults a thousand burning babies at you*

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9 years ago

*The one and only time End uses ?!.

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9 years ago

That's odd. I never expected End to use a phrase as insane as "thousand burning babies". It's so... EndMaster, It's its own brand! EndMaster, the combination of funny, weird, bizarre, revolting and outlandish. 

Also, BJ linked me to this thread. Don't blame me for this 7 day necro. 

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9 years ago

Keep it up! I loved the price of freedom (just wish i could write something i didn't hate).

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9 years ago

... Wow, I haven't been around in forever surprise

Anyway, hi everybody! Sorry I haven't been around and I haven't been getting much writing done either. Truth be told I've hardly had any time to myself recently. I was on a course for 2 weeks, then did 2 weeks work experience, then I got a new job and now I've got another new job and I've just started seeing somebody new so basically I just hardly ever have time to get any writing done.

My plan was to at least get the updated version of the first part of the game finished by Christmas but I'll have to see how much free time I can get. Bottom line, I am still working on the story and it's going to be awesome and I will make you all cry and you're going to hate me cheeky

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9 years ago

10 years later...

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9 years ago
How were people supposed to finish Kill Aman's Mustache While you were away? :P

Good to know, because I really really enjoyed Innocence Lost and I'll be looking forward to the second one. Keep us posted.

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9 years ago

Innocence lost sounds like a good name for a porn movie...

Can't wait to see where this goes! You're probably the best we've got, so your absent was noticed. XD Can't wait!

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9 years ago
Welcome back Briar!

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9 years ago

Welcome back! I sort of thought you were dead after coins shot you on that one thread... 

Oh yeah! Coins and CHOWHALL got banned while you were away. 

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9 years ago

Oh really? :o What happened?

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9 years ago

I dunno, but he's ovecompensated ever since I burned his dick off with a blowtorch. I wouldn't be surprised if it was a random act of violence to prove that he sitll had testosterone in him.

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9 years ago

Oh hell.. Shit went down while I was gone xD

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9 years ago

But now that you're back...

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9 years ago

... Well I'm not really back, right now I'm working 10 hour shifts 6 days a week, which doesn't leave much time for writing. cheeky

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9 years ago

Oof. 

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9 years ago
60 hours? Dear me, what do you do? Well, not that you'd disclose that. *Cue another "tongue sticking out" emoticon*

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9 years ago

Working at a new shop that's just opening, so right now it's just stocking shelves ready for Friday.

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9 years ago

And I bet the Admiral takes most of your time anyway.

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9 years ago

... You're weird frown

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9 years ago

You can understand Hitler now, right?

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9 years ago

Oof, right in the Godwin.

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9 years ago

I agree! This is not Reich!

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9 years ago

These jokes shattered my concentration camp.