Ever since I posted The Miracle of Jess, I wanted to do a sequel. Now that I know what I have to do to make it better(CYOA, different plots, etc.) I am thinking about it even more. Do you think that I should do it? I'm not going to be the one playing it, so it's up to all of you wonderful people on this site. If you want, leave some suggestions about what you want to put in the sequel; maybe I'll put it in the story!
That's all I wanted to say!
I'm a huge Whovian, with a huge bias.
With that SAID, this story was awesome. I rated it a... 6/8? I can never remember that shit. :P
Anyways, the writing was sweet. I really dug the style. However, what I can't stress enough is CHOICES! That's what defines a CYOA! I'm sure if you focus less on items, and more on meaningful decisions you will be writing a feature-worthy epic in no time.
Also, congrats on going Advanced with your first game.