There were a few run on sentences here and there, and there were commas/periods where semicolons would be better placed. There must be punctuation in dialogue. This:
She looked down at the precious infant in her arms, kissed their forehead and whispered to them:"There isn't much time left"
Could be written as this:
She looked down at the precious infant in her arms, kissed their forehead and whispered to them, "There isn't much time left."
And this:
"We don't have a choice its either this or starve we're orphans remember? we can't worry about what's wrong or right, we have to worry about survival" sitting down he munches on a piece of bread after finishing his sentence and continues "Its not like anyone else is taking care of us we're on our own and naive ideals won't cut it"
Can be written as this:
"We don't have a choice. It's either this or starve. We're orphans, remember? We can't worry about what's wrong or right; we have to worry about survival." Sitting down, he munches on a piece of bread after finishing his sentence and continues. "It's not like anyone else is taking care of us. We're on our own and naive ideals won't cut it."
Like Malkalack said, read your story aloud and see for yourself if it flows properly. So far, your story is pleasant. It has the potential to be an excellent storygame. It's really just the punctuation, odd flow and lack of apostrophes in certain areas that butcher it, to say the least. I'd also like to see more description and a bit more backstory on the characters and setting.