Hi. So I was thinking of writing a story on the site, and I was wondering what would constitute a good story hook. Whenever I write for anything else, my biggest issue is the opening paragraph, so I was looking for help. I'm still tossing around ideas with myself on what to write, but I'd still like help with the hook. I have an opening paragraph idea that I will write below, and if you guys could tell me anything that I should change about it, please let me know. Thanks.
P.S: If I put this in the wrong area or went about this the wrong way, please let me know. Again, thanks.
Here's the idea:
Crackle. Creak. Crash. You wake up to the arid smell of smoke clogging your nostrils, perverting the very air you breathe until it becomes poison. Hurrying, you dash to a window, avoiding all the burning debris falling around you and fumble with the red latch, trying, with all the indomitable hope and crushing fear you can muster, to open the window and get to safety. As the ashen smoke fills the entire room, you begin to cough and choke, throat parched and dry, while the latch refuses to budge. When it finally opens, you are gasping for air, suffocating, as you tumble out of the second story window into the bushes below.