Hey I was just wondering if someone would want to play test my game and point out everything I am doing wrong? :)
I wouldn't mind ^-^
Okay so focus mainly on the first page and the backstory page.
I think if someone playtests my first two pages I can use the feedback to help me write the whole story.
That's not how it works. The first two pages could have problems completely different from problems other parts of the story have. The feedback you get from a small part of a story cannot determine what the pros and cons of a whole, complete story are.
But what if I have not finished my story yet? I have only written three pages and want to know what I can do better while writing the rest of the story.
My point is, it's better to have someone read more than two pages of your story for feedback.
So what should I do?
Write a good percentage of it.
Okay I will do that.
Just add Seto as a co-author, and he can go behind you as you write to correct anything you mess up.
Is that okay with you seto?
@Seto
That works ^-^ Just tell me when you finished another page.
I'll edit any grammar/spelling mistakes first, then send you the feedback of the page in a pm.
It's done.
http://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-power-of-magic
