This sounds like a intriguing approach. Epic is all about perspective. Often for me as the scale of an adventure grows, it looses its personal touch, which is close to everything for me as a reader. Now, for a seven year old, everything is personal, and everything is huge. I'm most definitely looking forward to this.
10K seems pretty damn good. Good luck kicking off the adventure. :)
Not sure about the the title, everything else seems really cool and interesting about it, in a really unique way we don't get a lot of on the site. Best of luck.
You've got this buddy! You just need to think about your original reasons for why this story seemed like a badass idea when you first thought of it.
Or maybe think of some exciting places the story could go during the main plot or a side branch (as Ogre has said).
Good luck, I have full faith in you. Any chance you might be posting an excerpt for us at any point? :D
They're pushing her back and forth between them like some demented form of 'Hot Potato'. I loved this line.
This was well written and entertaining. Even with this short excerpt you showed that the character clearly has some life struggles and dilemmas, as well as setting up the general tone of the story.
The characters, although just introduced, each had their own personalities developed right from the start. That is not an easy feat in my opinion!
Now I am wondering what happens next and I can't wait to read this when it's published.
Congrats IAP. You've managed to avoid the SHAME that everyone else is seemingly embracing this contest.