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Hey guys, what do you think about my game "No Littering"? Its a W.I.P. I need your thoughts so i can improve it.

Moved this to Writing Workshop. Five second glance as I did so and the way the dialogue is formatted bugs the heck out of me but otherwise the writing looks fine and the prison setting at least should be interesting.

You probably should include a link in the thread.

Thanks, ill try to fix the dialogue.

By the way, what chat chat format do you prefer?

Please give me an example.

Well yours is in script format or basically like video game dialogue, which is kind of a pet peeve of mine. I can't speak for whether it would annoy anyone else, but if you'll look around at some other stories, most on the site write it the same way as in a novel.

"I'm going to shove macaroni up my nose," you say.

Eric looks excited. "Ooh, me too!"

Ah, okay.

Thanks for telling. Ill see if other people dislike it, i shall change it to another format.

I hate it too. It's wrong. Please fix it. Your current format is fine for plays, but this isn't one.

Ok, thanks for your feedback, ill try to change it.

Also, what chat format do most people prefer?

Use the one Mizal suggested. Also, I don’t like your chat formatting either. That only works for plays.

Alrighty.

Im not quite familiar with that kind of format, but ill try. Tell me if i made any grammar mistakes if possible.

That one's pretty easy to figure out as you go actually because you can just open pretty much any random book and find examples.