I wanted to ask for some feedback on my submission to the Creatures of the Night contest. This is my first time writing a story of any sort, so I'd really like to see where I need to grow as a writer. I appreciate the comment from LuvLee; I plan on putting in the planned content that was cut after the contest which should take care of that issue.
I'd like to know what people thought of the story. Was the style interesting or boring and drawn out? Did the characters (unlikeable as they may have been) feel like actual characters or one-dimensional? Of the people that completed it: did you stop after getting the first ending?
I would be grateful for whatever criticism I can get, so that my future stories will be of a higher quality.
Thanks, I'll give it some time, then.
Just reviewed, it looks like a good start.
I had to put down Steve's story to take a look at yours; now that you have 3 comments you can hopefully relax lol.
Thank you, I'm just eager to work on my personal development, excited by the type of feedback I can get from a community like this.
Perception is nine-tenths of the law, as I always say.
Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate that you took the time to write this up. I'm a big fan of unforeseen/far-reaching consequences to actions in stories, but I failed to give the reader any sense of control. Even a blurb in the description would have been helpful. In any case, I'll be incorporating the feedback that I've been receiving and finishing the story, hopefully by the end of the month. It'd be nice to actually include the major plot points this time around. I hope that everyone who played through already will take the time to go through it again when it's finished.
As far as future projects, you can look forward to my upcoming Love & Dating game, amongst other unannounced titles such as nopeeking! and its prequel (which will be released first) nodontlook!