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The new Shadow Guard path can easily be accessed through the very first choice in the story! When Mistress demands an answer, just pick Die and you'll be on the path of the shadow!

What's available in this expansion:

Two Chapter 2s!
Two Chapter 3s!
3 New Epilogues!
A deeper look at the shadows and their god Dendrin!
New characters including a new Eternal called Talia!
Twice as much swearing!
A chance to be a relative "good guy" if for some strange reason you're into that sort of thing!

And more!

(Anyway its been updated and reposted now)

The last two of those new features are hilarious.

I've only read up to one of the epilogues so far, but I'm planning on reading more now. It's really impressive. Thanks for adding new paths!

Edit: No sooner have your plans been put into action, Kane begins speaking again and this time he stands upon a windowsill completely naked.

“What the fuck…” you say to yourself.

That part cracked me up hahaha

"Anyway, someone named Zeke left a comment saying they tried to do the "right thing" and got punished. I sort of wonder what part they were referring to." (Original Thead)

I think he was talking about the beginning where you can either clean the fort or leave one of your Eternals with the gay captian. 

   *(Now to talk about this thread)  I don't remember any refrences to a Shadow God and I get to be a good guy surrounded by rebels, eternals, and corrupt goverment officals? 

            Edit: I'll give my report once i'm done reading to at least one of the offical ending.

I think a few others complained about leaving Gerald, but originally that incident was even worse. I ended up changing it so you subtly suggest to him that "accidents" happen and he kills Captain Pollo rather than just ...uh "taking it."

The shadow god was briefly mentioned during the confrontation with Cyrus. Not by name though.

And I said a chance to be a relative good guy which means you're only doing slightly less horrible things than you are as an Empire soldier and in certain branches that's still debatable. 

Haha, I loved that choice. "Hey, take one for the team buddy, bye".

Alright I finally decided to take a break from Eternal and have found two of the three Epilogues! 

(Spoiler Alert)= I found the Eternal Survivor & the Eternal Terror, I personally like the Survivor but Eternal Terror was a much better ending. Still I'll have to find the third ending. =(Spolier Alert End)

 

   Has anybody found all three yet?

Eternal terror was my first ending. It is the first time I've gotten through an endmaster epic without dying.

I was really torn at that ending because i wanted to tell the truth but I knew it was going to get me killed.

As a reward for his careful decision making (or just being really lucky) Uglick has unlocked a sneak preview of the True Eternal path for all of you!

Struggle

The pain is great and you want it to be over with as quickly as possible, but you know to beg for mercy would be shameful and you don’t want to die so you desperately try to push her boot off of you. Naturally you are unsuccessful and this response only enrages her further.

“Insolent fool! I said beg or die! Those were your choices and you dare defy my orders?” Mistress exclaims and takes her boot off of your chest, only to begin kicking and stomping on you. You try to escape, but she bends down and roughly picks up by the collar. “Don’t you dare try to run while I discipline you! YOU… WILL… O… BEY!” Mistress says while slapping your face at intervals of her verbal abuse. Finally she throws you to back to the floor.

“Now get back in your seat and never defy me again! Your life is nothing! ALL of your lives are nothing! Your lives will never be anything more than warm bodies to serve the Emperor! And you will not even be able to live up to that honored status, if you do not learn obedience. Remember this.”

At this point you stagger back in your seat, aching all over. It hurts a lot, but despite the beating, you don’t feel fear, instead you feel anger. Anger at Mistress certainly, but more at yourself for being so powerless.

Time passes by under the harsh guidance of Mistress. She teaches you all that she promised she would and then some. Your lessons are not only that of a combat nature, but of an academic one as well. You wouldn’t be aware of it, but you and your classmates are probably much better educated than other children your age.

As for you, Mistress rides you the hardest for defying her. There are more than several times where she basically pits the rest of the class against you during the combat training sessions. You suffer horrible beatings most of the time, but eventually you adapt and manage to hold your own until Mistress finds yet another way to make the fight unfair. You are obedient and follow the orders of Mistress, but internally you are harboring thoughts of resentment, hatred and defiance towards her. And so what if you are? She isn’t the Emperor. That’s the only person you really have to revere.

Your personality doesn’t go unnoticed by your instructor and watchers, they make note of it and decide how you should be handled in the next step of your training.

Will it be possible to kill her in the TE path?

I thought that might be the last choice. Most people who play for the first time will probably pick it. (at least I think so) Looking forward to seeing it when the time comes.

Actually I think i would pick Die. I've always tried to play with the Eternal Character's personality in mind. He seems reserved, bloodthirsty, strategic and survivalist in the story.

than silently perishing isn't his style. :P

Nope but I did get the third ending. It's really good.

What's it called so i can get a hint.

Eternal Messiah, though to me Eternal Survivor is more of the "good guy" path or at least the most moral out of all the potential epilogues.

Eternal Terror is probably the least moral out of all the potential epilogues so far.

That was the first shadow epilogue I got, it's much more of a moral high ground.

Alright, I've finished reading all of the new paths. The Eternal Survivor path was written beautifully. They were all great.

Anyway, it's my new favourite storygame on the website (didn't think I'd read something better than Death Song for years).

Since real life might be keeping me busy in the near future, I've been writing a bit of the True Eternal path now just so I can get some of it done.

So far I'm only into first few pages writing the path and its already pretty messed up. Like I had a vague idea of what I was going to write and how the events would play out, but when I started actually writing it, I kept coming up with a few minor ideas just to make it a little more twisted.

Don't worry though, its still in line with the rest of the content of the story. (It isn't LS obviously)

Besides, I imagine by the time every does read it, they'll be like, "Oh was that all? End writes messed up stuff like that all the time." Lol.

I do have other parts of the story planned out, even wrote dialog out between certain characters the Eternal will meet at some point, and background stuff, just because I didn't want to forget it while I was writing the SG path at the time. Most of the major characters in this one are going to be ones you only briefly came in contact with in other paths (One of them wasn't even named). A few new major characters will pop up and maybe some not so new ones too.

The last two epilogues are already planned out, just have to write ALL that stuff that comes before it, but as always there are always the possibility of changes.

I really hope during the True Eternal path you figure out who/what the Emperor is and if you can take his place.

I've just wanted to know what happened to Mistress this whole time. You know what happened to all of your teachers except her,and she's the most memorable :P

So I just found all three epilogues, and I must say they are all great. My favorite though would have to be Eternal Messiah. Great job as usual EndMaster, and continue the great work!

I personally like Eternal Survival.

^Agreed, but Eternal Terror was quite good.

Just found that one at around midnight last night, and it was my favorite ending as well. My favorite all-around story would be Eternal Survivor, but Messiah holds my favorite ending.

I've found those two, but I've yet to find eternal terror :( still looking though

Same here.

***SPOILER ALERT***

I assumed that it would take place where it splits into eternal messiah (at least where I thought it did) where you choose to go to Delerg instead of killing Flog, but all those branches get you killed. Now my guess is that the split occurs where you can choose to kill or spare Cyrus during your ascent to Shadowmaster.

Edit: Nope, that wasn't it. Maybe something after you already move to Delerg?

Going with Theo's plan or sticking with your own plan. It's like the first choice after you get to Delerg.

Found them all now. Out of them all I really liked Eternal Messiah. Out of the three endings it was a sort of "balance" between the extremes of the other two. For the sake of spoilers, I won't say what they are, but I thoroughly enjoyed them all.

One last thing: I died laughing at "Uncle Shadow's home for lost girls."

I Think The Shadow part of the story was good, But It just lacked emotion, also the ending where to simlar and it all seemed to focus on one thing the shadow guard.

You didn't expect the Shadow Guard Path to focus on the Shadow Guard?

Gee, the Shadow Guard section focuses on the Shadow Guard? Damn Endmaster, that's just terrible writing.

Herp da derp derp derp.

Well, at least I can't be accused of false advertising.

To hell with the fucking shadows, I want to safe the Empire and marry the Emperor's hot blonde daughter!

She's actually has black hair. Didn't you read the report soldier? :P

Given that the Eternals are practically "born" of the Empire, you technically already did marry the Emperor's hawt daughter when you got either with Brenda or Talia. They didn't have blonde hair though and you can only sort of save the remnants of the Empire if you get with Brenda.

(The only other way is to save it, is to stay loyal to the Empire while still being a shadow.)

I did that, but was disappointed that I didn't have an epilogue about the success of the Empire in the future. It was interesting though.

I did that too, I was supprised that it ended without an epilogue but i guess that's what the TE path is for. 

Yeah sometimes I like doing the "long dead end" path mainly because on 99% of the pages in any story of mine you only get two choices. If the "wrong one" always leads to an immediate dead end its almost like making a linear story, so I at least try to have a few long branches that don't always pan out to a major win.

I did consider making a "loyalist shadow" path, but I really wanted to save the whole Empire survives path for the last branch I'm working on.

"you technically already did marry the Emperor's hawt daughter when you got either with Brenda or Talia"

?In the end you "technically" commited incest lol.