A Sick Day

Hey, that was pretty nice, its a cool way to teach kids, and even some older kids might learn something! One question, though. Why is it in school based? 5/8

Far too linear, at least have two choice per page man, I mean cone on.

1: What the heck this story is doing on School-Based?
2: Too short.
3: Too childish.
Adapt it a little more (more children's cases, more ways to react, a longer story) and maybe will get a better rating.

Wow!what a great story

I chose not to take her. I feel like a horrible parent. LOL

Don't really know what kind of "sick" joke this is.

Get it?!

WHYYYYYYYY does Sally die, assuming she died

The spelling, grammar and all that is just fine, and the concept behind it is just fine (if not exactly the most riveting stuff) but it was so, so short.

As a children's game about health I could think of other scenarios more important to cover than whether or not mommy drives you to the doctor, too. Basic stuff like hand washing or not sharing drinks, or how to clean a cut or scrape and put on a bandaid, for instance.

I think it was a really good idea for a story but it was entirely too short and too easy. What age group is the story intended for? Both of my kids would be bored to tears and disappointed with the length. It was a great idea though. You probably should have waited to publish.

This was cute. I think you could've done more with it, such as teach about different kinds of infections and illnesses and the different ways to cure them, but for what was there, you did a decent job. ^_^