A UFO at School

So, this was pretty good.

It was of course, a bit random, but it probably wouldn't be easy to write a super realistic story about a UFO showing up at school.

I enjoyed the writing style, and the characters were pretty well developed (which is impressive since the storygame had a short length.)

You managed to provide an interesting plot, a setting, characters with personality, and a main problem in just 800-1200 words. Again, very impressive.

The length may have been short in terms of words, but I was glad there were at least a few choices and a couple paragraphs on every page.

Some of the situations seemed very, uh, convenient and unrealistic. Sort of like they just happened for plot convenience and weren't really thought of very carefully before being written.

I did notice a few errors in tense, grammar, and spelling, but not anything too major. All in all, a good read if you're looking for something short and simple.

4/8.

This was great for the stereotypical genre of little green beings from outer space. It gives some choice of action. It obviously wasn't meant as a serious work of fiction. There's not a deep level of character or plot here, but it's a short, after all.

Does the author mean to keep swapping tenses, or did he write it like that to keep us off balance? We will never know now, since those green blobs disintegrated him, along with his ordinary, everyday school and its pupils and staff.

i like aliens

Great short story; need to follow up with choices of destinations and choices of what to do once there

I went through all the options, its still short. But not bad.

It was a little short but ill go through it again, my rating may change you little green man

not good

skoop

it's fun

It was okay. The writing was a bit janky at times, but the narrative was well made and it branched in a satisfying way. You get an idea of what's going on and what Gavin's personality is.