Animal Jam Adventure

Although the story is fairly short, I thought it was going to be a regular Warrior Cats story...

...And then I was proven wrong (at least partially). With the lack of explanation as to the "race" (cat/human) at the beginning, I kind of got confused. But, after a little while, I realized they were cats. Surprisingly enough-to whoever is reading this-this is NOTHING like a regular WC story, and cannot be considered (in my opinion) as such. There are no "clans" like in the typical story, no blatant sex scenes, or completely horrible grammar. In fact, the organization, as the well as the grammar are not bad. My only issue is the fact that you spaced (I believe) every sentence, when that wasn't necessary. Also, the story, though there was room for choices and deviation, all of the choices felt kind of vague (with there not being too dialogue per page).

But overall, I don't think it is too bad, and I read it completely to the end, which was pretty decent for a story with this level of content and effort. I think that I'll give it a 5/8: the highest rating I'll give for a fan-fiction even slightly related to Warrior Cats.

Author: You have potential (possibly, since I'm no expert)! I think you can do even better, if you add more "meat" to your stories, and condense your writing more.

It was wonderful! I have never played animal jam before, but I love you choose your story, so fun. I hope you can add more detail into it. Keep up the good work!

Fuck that was such a fucking slog, and I barely skimmed it and just pressed links.

Prolly the warrior cats game with the most plot or something but holy fuck was this annoying and railroading.

If you're still around the site I would recommend, as the kids say, to "get gud" and write an actual story. This warrior cats shit is amazingly gay and no one in their right mind fucking likes it.

No one in their right mind likes you I would bet. I actually hesitated on this last second, but the need for it was confirmed by your fucking username.

Rot in the deepest pits of noobs hell, all the way at the bottom where you will be impaled by icicles for eternity, faggot.

Cool! :D

It was, well, interesting, but it just needs that something you don't know.

This was lovely and fun to read! it reminded me of Animal jam AND Warrior Cats my favorite book! Good Job! Keep up the great work Author! <3

I loved this. It's like in the end your friend still thinks your the best thing. It kind of reminds me to celebrate the last year of school at the start with a hug and a reminder of when I met my best friend :) then we have to move onto high school... I wish we were all going to HE same one.. but in the end we will keep in contact so I'm happy :3

This was great! I may have not been a very good friend through this, I looked through the journal. IMMA PLAY IT AGAIN ;)

This is great! :D

This is awesome!