Battle of Okinawa Chapter One (WW2 Simulation)

can't wait for more

REALLY. Short.

I was expecting an exhilarating, war simulator (like what the title suggested). It started off fairly promising with the description of the classic Japanese A6M Zero, an idiot teenager (who honestly shouldn't be there in the first place) and the landing on a beach.



Then it ended.



Look... I see that you're trying to make it a series 'n stuff, but please (in the name of all that is holy) please don't make it... what?.. four pages? You probably let down a lot of people who were looking forward to a WW2 simulator. If you're gonna make a part two, make it fairly long so that people will actually praise your work. I mean... it only had two endings! TWO! They were pretty much the same thing, honestly.

2/8

I blinked and it ended. Here's an idea, write your entire story and release it as one complete thing. Don't piecemeal it out in tiny fragments. The characters go from the Higgins boat to the beach. And then. The End.

Is there even a point? No, not really.

I understand it's exciting to publish something, but you're only doing your own work a disservice by hastily rushing things out without putting in the due time and effort.

Very short. there were a few spelling errors. You should have waited until you had more story before publishing.

Fun, but way too short. only 2 ending's but there were not any grammar error's. felt more like a story than a choose your story.

I thought that it was pretty good, but way to short, on your next story on this make it longer, this was only about four pages of length. I'm looking forward to reading these in the future.