Captain

A modern storygame by posleym

Player Rating?/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"

Based on 8 ratings so far

Story Difficulty5/8

"Run through the jungle"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"Need to be accompanied by an adult"

Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Player Comments

Depressing!

— RobustSporadic on 7/4/2012 12:53:27 PM with a score of 0

I'd rather have more content than better grammar

— alienalpha on 11/26/2011 12:18:15 AM with a score of 0

This was pretty bad, here's why:
- Poor Grammar.
- Linear Story (all choices but one always lead to death).
- 1-2 sentence pages.

Try again.

— Killa_Robot on 11/25/2011 11:45:08 PM with a score of 0

Horrible grammar, one sentence pages, limited vocabulary(which isn't what makes a game)and over all just bad.

— written_agreement on 11/25/2011 8:10:18 PM with a score of 0

Oh yeah, and the grammar was horrible. I can't believe that I left that off the last comment :P

— ThisisBo on 11/25/2011 3:07:28 PM with a score of 0

Did you try to publish this before? I seem to remember a really bad civil war game in the past as well.

Anywho, back to the critique. You had the options, sure, but some of the first options were death options. It's never good to put death links in the first choice page. Also, it doesn't matter how many choices you have if the pages don't measure up. Try to make your pages more than one sentence long.

— ThisisBo on 11/25/2011 3:05:41 PM with a score of 0

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Captain

Player Rating?/8

Story Difficulty5/8

Play Length4/8

Maturity Level4/8

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