Dead Justice rises from the dead

Short used new wrong, should be knew no plot or story no good ending. Realy it's way to short (5 pages).

Short. I ended the game in less than three minutes. Try to put more time into this game if you want it to be good quality.

Grammar. Please, try your best to at least put this through a word processor or something.

Well, the story made no sense... hard to follow, etc.

1/8

I am not sure what Dead Justice is but I'll take a guess he's not giving away free balloons... I'm pretty sure this is your first story EVER so it's not a bad effort. You need to work on your grammar: CAPITAL LETTERS, "quotation marks" and such things, try showing this to one of your parents or your teacher to read before publishing it on here.

There's not too much to say about this except keep working to make your stories longer, the punctuation better and put in a few more characters :) The more you write the better you'll get :D

it was a good game but some of it didn't make sense