HAUNTED HOUR!!!!

It reminds me of randomly generated poetry- where you give a computer a template of sentences and a bunch of words to draw from and see what combinations it comes up with.

No offense, but I don't enjoy this. This is more of a poem-based storygame, and I don't fancy poems fulfilling as a story.

5/8
Well done! Your poetry was exquisite and it made the story exiting. I love this!

A very very good poem.I loved it very very much.that rhyming words,rhythm etc excellent.
But a little short !! I am waiting for haunted hour part 2

... I enjoyed this poem more I think than I've enjoyed any poem in a long time. Utterly unburdened by rhyme or rhythm you have used the English language in a way that few have ever dared to dream of before and I hope the sequel is written in the exact same style. I enjoyed almost every line of poetry but these were my favourite:

Fear with sheer and away with away

With a facefull of smile which you make

She wished you happy birthday
And gave the cake to to cut Anyway

Your mother has turned into a ghostly gesture

Escape from the bladey nails
But what about the devils prevail!!!!

You have your inner feelings
But no time to think in this innings

Once again the luck is by your side
The nails pierce your shirts precise

Thanks again for sharing this unique masterpiece :)

I can see a lot of potential for this story but, you need to fix some of your errors and expand on your ideas

I like how this is written but needs to be longer