Player Comments on Halfway Decent

Cheesy things taste delicious...

Your first romance is a good romance! Another beautifully sculpted piece without too much need of words.

God, you misunderestimate yourself. There is no such thing as "cheese" on this thing, it's filled with what I can see to be genuine emotion (at least during the most romantic times in a relationship).

Your wording is excellent, very few if there were any errors that I found. The storyline was not too grandiose, as it is only about the development of two people's love for each other, but you make up by meticulously fleshing it out with many details.

The progression of their ages after choices goes fast, but I like it that way. Sort of like documenting the points of interest in their lives (surely make-outs and intriguing things don't happen ALL the time, eh?).

But even this wasn't perfect. The ending felt lacking (at least the HAPPY ENDING which I got), because it's like you rushed to a final conclusion that you will live happily ever after with Candace, eveb though you only said something related to proclaiming how far you'll go just to maintain loving her.

But at least everything else was good, and that is why this story is worth every cent. 6/8.

Not bad.

I liked the writing style, and the emotion the characters felt were really easy to feel and relate to, thanks to the detail you provided about how the characters felt sad, or happy, or loving.

The branching was average. Some choices didn't seem to relate to the rest of the story at all (the first one or two choices), but later on I enjoyed finding the three endings.

This was really cute, and I liked seeing the relationship develop between two kids from when they were wee children to when they were grown.

However, it was very linear. I guess that's sorta impossible to avoid when you timeskip 5-8 years every page or two.

Character development was pretty good, I liked seeing the characters personalities develop as they grew older.

4/8, not bad at all.

This was pretty interesting to read, the pictures in the beginning were cute to say the least.

I would've liked to seen the romance properly build to be honest, because there's not much that we know about two of the main characters. The story almost seems rushed in a way with how much time passes with each choice, but it does redeem itself somewhat with having the choices at the end effect which ending that you'll achieve.

I honestly found the writing to be cute and charming in its own way, but there's not much here when it comes to depth and choices in this storygame. But for a first this isn't bad actually, the writing and romance and general could have used some expanding on however. I think stories like this one in particular should try to connect properly with the reader and make them feel and care about the characters, but there's not much characterization in this story unfortunately.

Despite some of my issues, I found this to be enjoyable enough. Good work! :)

I would agree that this storygame is in fact halfway decent

Best dating game of all. Gave me a warm fuzzy feeling (no sus intended)

Honestly, I was looking for random game to play. I figured I'd start leaving reviews. I chose the path where I denied everything and everyone. I didn't want to speak. I didn't want to fall inlove. I didn't go out with the girl or the other girl and I didn't want to kiss her. yet I was still forced to feel some type of way about this girl when I really didn't want to. It seemed like a very romantic and cheesy game that just didn't stick with me. Yet, there were some snippets of writings that I enjoyed. Worth the play, Not sure if I'd replay.

Ha, a romance that's actually halfway decent!

I loved it! But then again I love any kind of cheesy romance...

It would've been nice to have more endings and to have the earlier choices affect the story more, but I liked the concept and it was well-written. Keep up the good work!

This was pretty cute. A good, quick read.

The first person perspective is something that I don't usually see, and it works very well with this story. The tone and writing style also contribute to the feel that I'm being told a story by someone. The dialogue is funny and the narration has some well-placed jokes as well.

There were some drawbacks, however. The spacing between paragraphs was weird sometimes, which isn't a big deal, just strange. Sometimes while reading, it was difficult to tell the difference between what's happening in that moment and what the narrator is thinking as an afterthought. There's a couple typos as well, but the biggest problem is that some paths overlap in places that are confusing for the reader. Sometimes a choice will lead to a path where the reader has missed a key detail to understanding the narration on the page, or the narration assumes something happened that didn't.

Overall, it was alright.

Good story and idea, but way too short and should show more of the relationship. Although I can find plenty of clichés, there are few choices, and the story is short, still a good story.

Very cute! A little cheesy, but in the right way. I loved the little touches of humor, and how the main character was fleshed out through them.

Celine is a whores name

pretty good! awfully short, though.

Gud for beginners. A nice short story.A little bit cheesy.

Pretty good I enjoy that it was not 100 paragraph but wish it was a little longer

Short but sweet.

It was ok but if there could have been another ending I would have totally liked it because I also have a soul just learned that now.
-Applesauce

I got all 3 all it was so happy and sad...I cried so now I finally have a soul...thank you video games, and the creator

i like it

Kind of short, but still fun to read.

that was pretty good for your first. keep writing!

I got a happy ending.

That was very cute :) I particularly enjoyed the line "I never knew contours could be so sexy". Still there were a few spelling errors and it could have been developed further into a "farewell my childhood self" type effort.

It is an amazing story keep ??the good work

Good

FAbulios

It's pretty good, could have been a little lengthier though.

it was good not gonna lie :) but it could do with being longer :)

That......was an interesting story. Make some more!

I played and got all three endings. I thought that is was mainly a complete story and the author went through a lot of time to make this, but I wish that on the happy ending that there was more completion to it. It was good, though.

Sexy contours...

You are an amazing writer, AND THIS IS YOUR FIRST STORY? I can see you being one of the top writers on this website in a while. Please make more stories for this one was......... as good as Snow, but less sad and amazing. In all truth and honesty it isn't that short, please make more stories, I will love you forever. 8/8

Its pretty good details are good, just about every thing is good. If i could say anything bad about it you might have pasted the time just a little to quick you shouldve added another chapter in the high school section but other than that is good

A very nice story. I was surprised that each decision at the start, while not seeming to contribute anything, actually affects later decisions. Good Work!

It was a great story just great I cried a little it reminds me of my ex ;( ;(
sincerly, 24freddy

It is pretty good writing, and the length is not too bad for your first story game. I liked that there were 3 possible endings. keep up the writing!

Great Story & truly moving, if a bit rushed.. needs to have a LOT MORE buildup (ye skipped through the most interesting parts of a romance story: playing together, getting to know each other, dating, ect). Too short, but a VERY good start.

Pretty good, I liked it, it was enjoyable and pretty well-written, especially for a first. My only criticism (although this may come with a bias since I'm not the biggest romance fan, even though I liked this,) is that I felt like I didn't see their personality as much, they felt like very static characters to me (this may be biased because I feel this way about most romance heroes and heroines.)

not bad, pretty good at relaying a story with out having too little or too much. I saw a minor spelling error, but other than that I would say this is well written and you should keep writing more.

Reasonably for a first attempt. Needs some minor editing, some parts were quite well-written though.