Shopping for Life

good but could be longer with more options

It has a nice concept and although the story has few choices, the sentences were well strung. If this could be improved with maybe more choices and some more backstory and storyline to it, then it would be pretty cool.

I really did enjoy the concept and creativity of this story, however, like any poorly made story, it is plagued by many flaws and errors. There were only a total of two different choices you could make, and about 4 epilogues in total. These epilogues and the choices themselves were, in no fashion, compelling and lacked any plot. It was either "You live a good life" or "You die and live a bad life".

3/8 The story and descriptions themselves were adequate at best. However, the format of the story made it a pain to read through. I assure you that if you broke down that wall of text into coherent paragraphs that flowed well, not only would your writing stand out, but your readers would appreciate not having to squint to make out sentences.

It's ok I know the author and I will tell him myself the rest.

There just wasn't enough information on the pages for me to know what exactly is going on. The writing was bland at best and the story is way too short. Sure the idea is cool, but it is up to you as the writer to expand upon it and bring a better quality story.

Its good, but its wayy too short. Only two four choices in the whole game. Good writing, bad story