The Golden Relic

You need more details, more background, more story, more everything

Biggest problem was that it was random, most of the events have no logic t them and there's no way for players to make informed decisions.

It was...okay. There was only one choice that you could make without dying so you should edit that. 3/8

"Do this or do that" "Go left or Right".
Short, lazy, and the choices don't feel uniqe.
Though, it's not pure crap so it's not a 1/8 from me



2/8

Too short. I feel like the gnome wouldn't trade a relic for three gold coins. Maybe the economy in that world is rough lol

One, there is very bad writing. There is no description whatsoever and random deaths. You get two choices, and you get no hint of which path to take. If you want a really good story, you should start the story with some description of the main character, the plot of the story, or at least a little introduction.

That was not good at all. First of all, lots of grammar mistakes. Second, no real plot or backstory. Third, extremely linear. You need to take it down and make some serious edits.