White Room

It had its ups and downs i'd say.

The writing was really good and the plot was well executed. I could easily picture the situations because you provided a decent amount of detail. So well done with that.

Sadly, there are some flaws here to weigh the good writing down a bit. I thought the storygame was rather random, and the choices didn't seem to make much sense to me. But I suppose it might be hard trying to imagine choices in the situations the character was in for this story.

There is a small amount of character development, but I would have liked to get to know them more. Developed, well fleshed out characters are a very important part of storywriting.

I also found the storygame rather short, despite the decent amount of writing on most of the pages.

This also feels rather incomplete, and I don't have a sense of closure after I read it. I really want to know what happens next.

4/8, good job but fix the flaws please.

It was interesting at least. It reminds me a lot of those old choose your own adventure books, particularly the UFO one.

it s fun but confusing

This was a really cool experience!

This was a really cool experience!

I had fun with this. Creative and it kept my attention. I'd love to see more.

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I was confused but good job

I really like this game! It's creative and refreshing. Even though it's rather short, it still feels complete. I love the ending - I've always been a fan of tragedies/stories where the protagonist doesn't win.

If there were a fault to this, I'd say it lies in the only ending you have. Not that the ending was bad, but that it was the only one. It would have been nice to see an ending where you can't get out of the white room, or anything else you could come up with. I'm left curious as to what will happen next, which isn't a bad thing, but in replaying it and looking at everything there is, it's just boring in the sense that there's nothing new you can find.

That said, this story is anything but boring! It's very descriptive and even has a bit of humor to it. I do really like it and I hope that maybe one day you'll make a second? Though, you don't have to. As said, I'm just curious for more.

Pure twist. I love it. Hope you can make a sequel or add more modifications to it.