Player Comments on A Strange Day in July

You were obviously trying to make an emotionally moving story, but without getting more information about the relationship, it's very difficult to relate to the characters. Instead of statements about how close they are or how long they've known each other, try showing a few moments where their relationship developed. Perhaps as flashbacks.

You should also make it much clearer what the choices are and who is making them. Are we choosing Emma's actions?

If you include supernatural elements like changelings, it's important to explain what that means.

But not bad for a little first story.

i have no idea what happened. i still don't know what a changeling is. also it would be nice if the choices were clearer and the characters actually had personalities

This felt very disjointed.

Very short and didn't understand much of the story, but for a fantasy amusement it isn't too horrible

Well, this wasn't really a game I was looking for, because it didn't really have any sort of emotional explanations as to what was going on, it talked about their relationship, but other than that, it wasn't quite as detailed as I would have wanted it to be. I don't even mind that the story was short.

This story was confusing. Why would an inseparable best friend call his friend a freak and make fun of them for an hour? What is a changeling? What is the horrible thing that happened at the lake? Why does she cry so much? What does July have to do with anything?

Sorry but way to short and I couldn't tell if I was the changeling or not sorry I rate 1

I didn't know what was really going on. Judging by the other people's reviews,I was not sure if i was playing as a character or a being. there are a few grammar errors too.

Nice, but I didn't really understand.

What happened???! I couldn't follow it!

Because of the choices, the story itself was hard to follow.

I was really confused, i wasn't sure if i was playing a character or acting as an omnipotent being. Also it jumped straight to him digging and attempting to break some crystal when i choose to help Emma. It was short and lacked detail. Jumping to the end rather quickly was a bad idea because i felt this could become so much more.

It was strange, I didn't really understand the plot.

It seems like you were trying to make a story like Snow. 4/8

It's okay. Doesn't make much sense, and isn't that well proofread.

It was good enough. Like Evagirl said, you were obviously trying to make it emotional, but I felt like I didn't understand and know the characters well enough. Also, a few extra choices and a clearer story would be much appreciated. Keep working, I'm sure your storygames will be amazing one day if you try hard enough.
Rating: 3/8

Even with as little description as others have previously stated, this story was adorable. Such a sweet almost romantic setting, I could see the characters in Ponyo-like animation.

it was good. A little short. Okay. A lot short. I felt like it was the begining of a great story. Then it ended and i had that same feeling i get when somone steals my french fries. Cheated out of the awesome.

It ended rather quickly. I like the idea of not having an overload of choices, but I knew very little about them and it made it more difficult to care about either of them. Maybe it's because I didn't make all the right choices... Anyway, sad and sweet. Good job.

Sad...

A strange story written in July. Kinda cute, or whatever you could call it, but also very linnia. 3/8!

What Eva said. Do that and would have been good.

Well you're not a bad writer and the kids relationship was cute, but this game didn't really make sense to me. Why was the girl afraid of the lake? What was the bad experience she had there and if finding and breaking a lunchbox was all she needed to set her free then why didn't she just do it herself?

take more time to develop your characters and their relationship. Show, don't tell how close these two are. How do you interact with your closest friends? Siblings? significant other? These interactions in real life can be helpful in developing relationships between fictional characters

i need to stop playing games likee this they make me cry it was short but i loved it

yay

Choices didn't confused me. Its pretty fine.

really confusing and I didn't get what the options were

uh... no comment.

A tiny bit confusing, but still interesting enough. It's marked a 'Demo', does that mean there is more to come?

Not bad.