Player Comments on A summer in Maycome

It needs work, very repetitive.

Not very good, repetitive.

I loved this book and tried to follow the way the book did, but it disappointed me that the story was not the same

Oh, one thing that I forgot to mention is that the warning and the five maturity rating are completely unnecessary. I think? I got the best ending and two others, and I never actually came across a 'graphic' description of Boo.

Having the possibility of getting killed by Mr. Radley may be kind of tonally out of place, though. None of the kids were in actual danger of being murdered by their neighbor for goofing around doing dumb kid stuff...a shotgun packed with rock salt is going to sting but not actually injure anyone.

This had some flaws but I have to say I really enjoyed it. School project or not, it's nice to see fanfic on this site based on a book that was actually GOOD.

I PMed you about the font and colors in the description already...again, it's all a bit painful to look at and regular text would've been just fine. (The story itself is in plain text though, for anyone with concerns.) And again, it's 'Maycomb'.

I kind of loled at AYT's comment on 'Jem and his buddy'. Er...they meant 'Jem and his sister Scout, the protagonist of the entire book' I assume? Though while I wouldn't call this story 'pointless' at at all, it's true there was a lot of unnecessary padding. Having the entire house to explore at will reminds me a little of an interactive fiction game, though in a CYOA format that approach may not work as well. The issue too is that the description of most of the rooms amounted to 'nothing to see here', which in the context of a CYOA (where each page is generally focused on advancing the plot and not exploration and environment simulation the way an IF game is) means they didn't really need to be included.

So if you ever do expand this, that would be an issue to address. Still, I really enjoyed this and hope you get a good grade, and I'd like to see more of your writing on the site. I hope you enjoyed To Kill A Mockingbird as well, IMO it's considered one of the greatest books of all time for a reason. (Harper Lee passed away just a couple of months ago btw...I always thought it was kind of a shame she never wrote another book, but I guess when your first one has such impact maybe it can't be topped...)

This was a little pointless. All I did was play with Jem and his buddy all day and learned about Boo Radley. Wasn't much of a shocker so maybe you could turn the rating down a bit. The game was bland and I didn't really have much fun with it, but I liked it....in a way. I'm going to give it a three, because of its length and the overall blandness.