Player Comments on A War Story

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-lowers finger
Just, just no.

There were so many things wrong with this game.
1. I learned more about the story in the description than in the game. Not good. If it wasn't for the description, I could have been anybody.
2. Too linear, and too short. There were exactly THREE choices and ONE possible ending in the story. All three of those choices had only two outcomes: "you live" or "you die".
3. Terrible spelling and grammar. At least have another person proofread this story if you can't even use spellcheck. Honestly, if you can navigate the Story Game Editor, you should have the "their/there/they're" concept down.
4. Bad maturity rating. Sure, the death scenes aren't graphic, but I don't think a seven-year-old should be reading about having their face blown off with a gun.
5. Not descriptive, there is no mood created. Am I supposed to feel scared? Angry? Tense? I don't know!
6. Sloppily put together. It looks like you've got an idea, but grew tired of it after the first page and slapped it together in five minutes. At least make it LOOK like you've tried.
I suggest that you do NOT make a sequel unless you improve THIS story.