Adventures of a Normal Man

Player Rating4.37/8

"#238 overall, #26 for 2015"
based on 110 ratings since 01/29/2015
played 1,401 times (finished 102)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

RELEASE: Broken pages and bugs fixed from the pre-release (the ones I could find). The Nodnol path works now (though it is REALLY short... why did I give you the option, anyways?)

This is my second first game (I published my first one couple of days ago... but I worked on that one after I started working on this one...which means that this one sucks even more. Because it's my first game.)

Yeah... this one is going to be a 3/8... that doesn't mean I WANT a 3/8! No, not at all!

Again, sorry if my game sucks...

Easter Eggs:

Nondol- when read backwards it spells London.

Fine- a parody of a town in the Western Europe, called Nice

Mr. Alcheast- a parody of a youtube channel called Alchestbreach

One more thing, when you get an item that gives you points, DO NOT use it on the same page... this will result in a glitch that will insert a virus into CYOS... you have been warned

 

Player Comments

This game is actually pretty good, despite having numerous errors.

Here's a tip of advice for you, let someone else proofread this game for you. If you're not good at English, it's alright. Still, each story has to be revised for quality, and you can ask for help from the wonderful members on this site for help.

Onto my review!

This game is a nice attempt for your first game, even though it suffers from errors. Your use of the advanced editor seems proficient enough, but you need more experience, particularly in scripting. You can exploit the game and get some things for free, without the necessary items to get them.

Your use of humor seems to be fine, although it's still random and randomness usually doesn't work in stories. This story is no exception, as there was an instance where if you don't follow the narrator, you get killed by random reasons.

The problem is... although this story was of decent length, it ended abruptly. That makes this storygame a part 1 or a demo essentially, but it seems complete enough to not be qualified as an incomplete game.

If you were to make a part 2, make sure it's proofread for quality and is complete. There is a path I took that is incomplete, which is the Fine path, and I hope that you complete it.

My rating is 4 for fine.
-- Plelb on 3/25/2017 1:27:55 AM with a score of 0
The fact that English is not your native language is quite clear. "After all, you told him that when he suggested you to girlfriend Casey." <--huh? Also, tommorow is the incorrect spelling of tomorrow. There are many grammar mistakes, and they did disrupt my reading of the storygame a little.

I applaud you. You managed to put humor and game and story (well, that lacked a little) and decent writing skills together to form a good storygame!

But. That was basically a demo. No demos please. It ended too soon, even though the story was of medium length... Now I want to read the next part!!!
-- Crescentstar on 12/5/2016 10:31:55 PM with a score of 0
I found it funny and a good bit of entertainment. As for your spelling and grammar, I find that you not having an English origin gave it a bit of character.
-- Skike on 4/2/2017 3:10:44 PM with a score of 0
Fun
-- Jacob on 3/30/2017 11:12:21 PM with a score of 0
A great story just very unfinished.
-- Nick K. on 3/29/2017 11:58:45 AM with a score of 0
Ending is not satisfaing...
-- ProXHunter on 3/21/2017 11:25:37 AM with a score of 0
I do not like that this game is unfinished. I didn't have 4 melee, but I was still able to fight those guys at the market. I enjoyed the humor though.
-- VRoman on 3/1/2017 5:20:35 PM with a score of 0
Good Humour
-- Anon on 1/22/2017 6:54:45 AM with a score of 0
This definitely has potential, but I don't think Nondol is London backwards :P
-- TharaApples on 11/27/2016 5:37:48 AM with a score of 0
I ment to click better than resses cups but i missed, liked the story, kinda liked the rpg aspects, didnt like that it wasnt done, it brought a tear to my balls
-- Yoem on 6/8/2016 9:02:00 AM with a score of 0
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