Player Comments on An Escape from Ruin

I enjoyed this story, I think a good effort was done in making a rather emotional piece, but I couldn't help but feel that the end came rather abruptly.

This doesn't mean that the writing was bad, but this story was honestly very short. Also, nothing was explained as to why the city is suddenly collapsing, and by the dialogue, that happening didn't seem to be a single occurrence either.

I would like to acknowledge that this was a interesting premise, but it doesn't feel like a full story when all is said and done. A backstory as to what, where, and why these things were happening would've done a great service in fleshing out the narrative.

There's potential in this story. I liked the writing and the tense atmosphere, but there just isn't much here. The biggest issue that seems to plague this story is it's lack of explanation to the reader.

It is rather hard to get connected to something that you know little about, at least for me at times. And I knew so little about the situation and characters. Even a little exposition is good when you want the reader to feel certain emotions while experiencing the story.

So in the end, this wasn't a storygame that I disliked, but it wasn't one that I found to be wholly enjoyable.

This is a very short story and is ultimately very boring because of it. It could have paid off with a longer story, explaining some of the weird things some of the stories end with. It was very short and ultimately, I found it a waste of my time. It had a lot of potential, but it was not used, leaving the story lacking.

Good:
1. Originality
2. Nonlinearity
Bad:
1. No explanation for setting or backstory
2. Random deaths/endings- it's not a Difficulty storygame, where the reader has to think or read carefully for clues, but rather just random results
Ugly:
1. The Description hints at character and emotional development, but there's none of that in the story
2. Unclear what character motivation or reasoning for actions are- some character behavior is unrealistics, and setting really isn't clarified to be fantasy

I was really good. I had to think about planning an emergency escape.

It was fun

It started well, wanting me to read more, but after the first few pages each page was very short. It’s as if you tried to make a long, exciting story but didn’t have the time to finish it properly. Some of the pages are one line long.

I’ve given you a 3/8 and I don’t know why I’m writing this because you’ve been inactive since 2012.

The first page was really interesting with a nice emotional dilemma. But then it just sort of fizzled out. The pages got shorter and shorter and there was no real sense of character. This could be really impactful if it was fleshed out a bit more and we got to see the character's emotional connections to those in the town.

The core dillemna of whether to focus on saving self, spending your last moments with those you love, or helping others is really good. It's just not enough is done with that.

pretty short needs some work but besides that its good

Good game, I likes the feel, I could picture the whole scene in head, good work

It was too short

Too short.

Little shorter than I like. Good job though.

Cool, just wish it was longer.

Needs more backstory. I had no idea what was going on.

Yay~ I made it out okay!

I felt that it was to short and I think that people might like it beater if it had more suspense and was a little longer

... Um... I sense a lot of potential here, but there's no real build up, so the pay off isn't really that great.

Some good choices are available, which is refreshing, but the text on each page is a little lacking. Also a little more background into the city and it's destruction would be good. I did like the eerie ending with the woman, however.

This story could really be epic if it were just longer.

I really liked it. Very nice amount of endings and I liked going back and finding them all ^_^

Seth says NO!!!! After 3 or 4 pages i won....this sucked.

Not very many possiblities or choices, but great potential

pretty good for a hort story. Vision ending brought up more questions than answers. I like it :)

i got the best ending

pretty short and really easy

Okay...

Could do with more background info, but good choices and language

Ok then, 4/8...

it was okay 3/8

I finished that very quickly

Kalun slightly approves.

I like how non linear it is. Its also quite original. Where it falls short is that some of the events destroy the stories beleivability. I explored most of the story, and I have to say that I did like it.

NICE

Pretty good.

I wish it would be longer. Ya know? What happens when they get into the city? I'm so curious. It was a great plot too! Good job!

Ugh, ignore urnam. He/she posts those things everywhere and the bad and ugly are mostly just trivial little things. I like how you can decide your own character's decisions, but I wish I knew why the city was collapsing. I mean, if the city was collapsing, and everyone knew it (at least I think they did, seeing as your character was expecting the city to collapse in a few hours) why didn't they evacuate sooner. Still, it was an enjoyable story, Bo approves.