Player Comments on Atlantis

You know that slow loading time in between pages in a storygame? Yeah, it’s a nice break and is welcome in a long, wordy storygame. But when you have to spend more time waiting than actually reading, it gets pretty tedious. This is doubly true when the choices are all arbitrary ‘stay put’ or ‘run’ decisions and every other page looks damn near identical. I often do question whether an author put effort into making a storygame fun when it was written, but in this case it’s almost like you were deliberately making a boring experience for the player. At least you didn't make us play through a really long story like this. Having said that, this is also one of this game’s downfalls.

Because your story was so short, and there was so little plot and zero character development, I felt no investment whatsoever in this. I felt nothing when the player character was shot. Dying or almost dying gave me no emotions of dread, disgust, defeat or even anything, for that mattter. There was no sense of victory when I won. All I got was a crappy non-item (i.e. unusable, useless and not even cosmetically, humorously or otherwise extrinsically rewardig) with the default shit-coloured sack image at the end. It was just click, click, lose, click, click, win.

How do storygames like this get published? Seriously, what does anyone get out of this? Other people don’t enjoy playing rubbish like this. Did you, the author, enjoy making this? I don’t see how you could have fun writing something with so little effort put into it, but I'm hoping that you did have fun. At least someone would have gotten some joy out of this.

Fuck you for making anyone play through this awful, no-thought-given piece of garbage. If you ever do return to this website, which is doubtful, I hope you unpublish this.

You should vary your sentence structure so that all of your sentences do not start with "You". I also noticed it is possible to pick up 3 ray guns. I doubt that was intentional. Proofreading for Grammar errors and story inconsistencies, and having you game play-tested before publishing would have eliminated many of your errors

I want to give you guys higher ratings, I really do. I can see the effort and the desire to make orignal and funny games, which they are. But, you guys didn't really do well in the spelling or descriptions of the story. Things really happend quickly and I really didn't know what was going on.

My advice is too work harder and longer on your stories, at least for two weeks. If you do that, your stories will be much better.

3/8

Random punctuation, misspelled words, and more grammatical errors than I am willing to overlook. If there was a story here instead of just a series of random events, I couldn't find it.

Its truly good but wheres the description?

A little bit mystifying to be honest, I think sentence structuring and coherency are the best things to improve here. Unless the author's young in which case it was a good effort :D

Utter waste of my time.

"You forget to breathe so you suffocate and die"

...seems legit.

A trillion dollars? Damn, I could start my own country.

so good lol

I like how it's so easy

Funny, but short.
6/8! Good job!

It seems I can 'brake' my neck in this game.

Aside from all the other comments, I'd also like to add that fake choices are even more annoying to me than completely linear games. I'd rather choose and have to go back and choose the other option than pick a choice and be faced with two ways to die and then have to go back, because it just makes me angry. It's like you're trying to lie to me or trick me and then I still end up having to follow a linear path anyway.

Even the minimal effort you put in the game was a waste, considering the plot was horrible, and while you had items, I never had to pick up an item. I literally clicked each link, and I was able to shoot without the ray gun.

This defines the minimum standards for the site. In other words, it's positively horrible. There's no story, no description of any quality, no character motivation or anything else that constitutes a good adventure.

Uhh... Sorry but at which bit was this funny and hilarious? I'm not saying that to be mean, I just didn't see any jokes in the game.

Seth says NO!!

Awesome Does Not Approve!
I lost, but I ended up getting about six ray guns when I did. Also, the game moves too quickly, and the player does't get much say in what happens. I mean, come on, you forget to breath so you die? Come on!

...What? I think he's trying to speak to me, I just know it! I see the beginning of a plot but poor execution. This had the execution of a randomnese story but I don't think you were going for that. You need to do a WHOLE lot more of describing what's going on. The Reader had only a very vague semblance of what was happening. Try again, with a little more polish this could be good. 4/8

With work this could be a great game. Try telling people what's going on, like: who was the dead guy? Why was he important? What were the crystals? Also describe the surroundings. You sould proofread before you publish.

You really could do a better job of helping us understand what the hell is happening. Also, one ray gun should be adequate.

Not realistic an bad English.

ugh, man, you need to do more to impress someone.

Erm...

This was...interesting.

What. The. Hell. Did. I . Just. Read?
Honestly, I have no idea what is this about.

Ok

Well, I don't know what to say... That story was just totally random. It's safe to say that there were no pages with more than three sentences and it was full of spelling mistakes. On the other hand: you did implement items.

Try to work a little longer on your next story ;)

self explanitory
not in a good way

It makes sense that the coauthor is the only one wanting a sequel.

Please say there will be a sequel

I have no clue how but i got like 10 ray guns...

I could eat alphabet soup and crap out a better story

not too bad, just try to work on making it a bit longer

no idea what was going on at any point in the story. I understand you're trying to be funny and random, but you still need more than two sentences on each page.