Player Comments on Cat's Day

A warning. I am going to start bitching about a lot of things, that have to do with what a cat does.

Normally, a stereotypical cat wouldn’t be going around chasing squirrels. That is something the stereotypical dog does. Now, I am not saying that not something that a cat may do, but as a cat person, I can tell you that that is not what most cats do.

Now actual constructive criticism: One of your first choices was to eat and drink, without the owner being awake. Maybe you should go into the variables and mess around with that to make sure you only can eat and/or drink after the owner is up. Secondly, your story was short. Extremely short. A little descriptive writing would be nice, but still was very rushed. Third, your grammar could use a lot of work. And don’t be shy to ask for help! There are a lot of people you can PM that would help you fix your grammar. Overall, a 3/8.

This is another nice little story, but it really needs a little proofreading. There are a number of different errors on the first page including word use, typographic errors, and tense errors. I do like that there are choices in the story, though the first page might be labeled something other than “The First Page,” especially since there’s an option to go there in the story itself. The your vs you’re error shows up more than once as well throughout the story. That’s a painful error to read.

The story itself has lots of potential and is a neat little story. I like the options that you have as a cat, they make sense and are fun. Yes, they do all lead to the same ending, and that makes for quite a short little story, but it still works, generally. I just think each page could be enhanced with a few more details about what your cat is seeing and doing. There could be a lot more information about everything from the smell of the other cats to the chase of the squirrel. A nice little story, though, thank you for sharing it with the site.

I liked it, but it wasn't the best.

The writing was pretty good, but it wasn't very well fleshed out due to a lack of detail and branching. It was very short, and I think there were about two actual "choices" that led to another page, but I suppose that's what i'd expect since it has one ending.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors, such as "til" instead of "till." Errors like this make me feel like this was really lazy since it was so short, and a story as short as this should be easy to proofread.

It was cute in a way, but the emotion really didn't hit me until the last page, which seemed to have a lot of effort put in while other pages seemed written very quickly.

It feels like it was written in a day, honestly. I guess it's not easy writing a very long story about a cats home life, but that's just an opportunity for you to be creative! :D

3/8.

Can yuo make a seqle

The cat just gives up no matter what. You are a sad person whoever made this.

It was an alright game and it was a short fun game.

Bad

I love this book

A story this short has only one excuse to have such bad grammar. I understand it if English is a second language. Otherwise this is terribly rushed through and wasn't looked over at all before it was published. This is a writing site for god's sake. Improve!

love it! :3

Bad it has all the same endings

The writing style was nice, but it was full of grammatical and spelling errors. And there was a significant lack of plot (although I guess that's typical of slice-of-life stories like these)

That was kind of cute. ^_^

I don't like it,when you get outside you can only do one thing without getting lost and ending the game

Lots of loops taking you back to previous menus, often perplexingly so. Once I saw "Your on your owner's bed" I was deeply skeptical, and I was right to be so.

Spelling and grammar errors, my english teacher would kill you.

This was a nice simple short story and I enjoyed reading it. There were a couple spelling and grammar errors (Your and You're) and a few inconsistencies. For example you said the food was 4 hours old, yet the owner hadn't even got out of bed yet which suggests that the food was put out in the middle of the night by some unknown character. Maybe I'm overthinking it!
These things can easily be spotted from a quick proof read and considering how short this was it wouldn't be too difficult to do.

Short, not much detail till the last page. 3/8

It was a very creative story and I was thrilled to see that there wasn't any warrior cats in it.I would really like to see a story that contains warrior cats for some inspiration and motivation. And to be amused of course! I hope there is a part two!!

It's a little short, and I feel as if it would be improved with a bit more length on it and more than one ending, but since it's your cat, it kind of makes sense you didn't add multiple. 5/8

i guess it's okay...

I like it a lot, although there are a few minor grammar errors, but that's okay! I'm just a complete grammar nut!

it's ok.

cats:]

Great for your first game! But maybe try and make it a little longer.

cute:)

Heh..Nice game i was looking for a warrior cats game but well...This is good!

Few mistakes, but it was good.

There were some spelling mistakes, but, overall the idea and the concept is great. (Great for Animal Lover's that is!) Alll that is needed for this storygame is for it to be longer. Great Work NinaB.R.!

Too short, all is the same, very bad

I enjoy cats very much and choosing my story brought me some delight. My only problem was it was so short. I really would have liked something a little longer. I like cats though. :3

I loved this story, because it resembles the book 'Socks' by Beverly Clearly. Taken place from the view of a cat is always a good choice for beginners.

It's a great story, and it's a lot of fun! However, there were some grammar errors and I think it could be just a little bit longer.

Hello. I am new leader of bloodclan and I like this and all, but I would like some other choices and things in the story, At least you put you effort in it #COUGH COUGH Unlike warrior adventure COUGH COUGH#

Good but to short

THIS STORY. IS AMAZE 8/8 CULD B BETTTTTTTTER

kinda, short

It was nice.

naughty kitty

Cute, but cats don't know English..

It was so cute

Two words,wonderful and delightful. A amazing story.

Good game! :P

It was alright. Not bad.

good

good ;)

It was fine but maybe you want to explore different thoughts for cats. Cats don't chase squirrels: they hunt. It's a natural instinct. And they are very independant and smart. They don't need us to survive. Once my cat went away for a week at a time and she came back perfectly fine and she was an old cat! I think you have the skill to delve deeper into an animal's mind. I am just commenting this to help you with future stories, I mean no offense. Sincerely Clumsypaw
P.S. Work on your spelling, PLEASE!!!

i like it just the life of a cat

Very few spelling/grammar errors, lime saying your instead of you're. There is no real plot, and the end is somewhat confusing. Overall,
6/8

Very few spelling/grammar errors, lime saying your instead of you're. There is no real plot, and the end is somewhat confusing. Overall,
6/8

THis game is dumb just make warriors games plz.

I, LOVE THIS GAME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!#SWAG

hmm not to bad.. I fairly enjoyed it though do wish there were a bit more choices and a bit more time on trying to get the spelling right well since you said it was just a test try it isn't that bad but next time can you make it about a wild cat??? please? anyways it had some funny jokes I tried every path to really take it in.

im sorry I didn't really like it :(

Not man options, but as you said, this is a test. I liked it.:3

AWWWWWWWWWW SO ADORABLE

...Okay, fine... I played two times....

SHORT.... It's ... fine, i guess.

make one about a wild cat please

That...was short

umm... if u don't have anything nice to say, don't say it at all?!?

It was very well written,but not much happened.I would of really liked it there was more choice at the ginger cat part like,you could choose to attack him,hiss at him or just ignore him.Other then that,this was awesome.

sorry, i dident like it much :(

4/8. Not much of a game, but I have a soft spot for cats and small children. This appeals to the former.

Good for a first try. I look forward to seeing some more in depth stories in the future

nice

I just wrote my first too, and I have to say, this is much better than mine!

It was cute :) My only advice is to work on grammar. It was cute!

its cool

Eh its ok

It was okay but the parathinses was a bit annoying at times. There could of been more choices too.

I love it! Nice Job.

really cute Game i liked it!

it was fun

D'aww, this was cute. A bit unsatisfying, but still a nice little cat break.

Epic

Its nice. Pretty fun and i could sooooo picture my cat doing that.

I thought this was going to boring, but, it was pretty good. I'm impressed!

Very cute! Just up a bit on the length and difficulty chart and you'll be on your way to success! 5/8

Cute game, I love playing as an animal. It really makes you look at the world differently. I would have loved to see a bit more cat senses, like the fact they're more interested visually in something moving, or their insane hearing. But definitely a fun time.

Not bad. I'll call it kawai^^

It was okay.

Knocked a point off because it wasn't proofread and yu kept doing that thing I always do where you think one word but for some reason your fingers type another. Still liked the story though. Cats are cute. ^_^

I like cats.

It was ok. The spelling was decent and it had a good amount of options. The thing I think holding this game back was that it could have been more interesting and exciting.

4/8

Short, but sweet. ^^

Good start, but you can create better stories, I know it.

Nice little story, but I didn't realize cats like to chase squirrels too. I'm more of a dog person and they sure do!

I look forward to reading some of your longer work, like say: Cat's Month? <0+0>

Dog would have been better lol

Pretty good for a test story.

:3 meow meow meow..... MEOW that was pretty good could've done better though... MEOW!!

I like cats, so I could picture the plot in my head. But, next time, you might want to try adding pictures to help tell the story.

Obviously the story could have been longer and more developed too.