Choose your Life

Well... that was terrible. Here's why:

PLOT: Well, this game is "choose your life" however, little choice is actually offered. The first few pages of the game are literally "You are a girl. You are tomboy", which doesn't exactly scream RP. You did include a few choices, but they were unrealistic. I clicked run away on the second choice, randomly found money, then became a rich scientist. Basically, your story left my brain yelling "WTF?"

ITEMS: Your use of items to say yes was just annoying. I understand toying around with items to get the mechanic, but if you're going to to do that it's generally better to just use actual items. If you're a young tomboy, why not include a slingshot or something like that to get into trouble or play or whatever it is you come up with? That would include an element of diversity without causing the reader to have to use items for no reason (which trust me, will make you drop in the ratings).

LENGTH: Well, really there wasn't any. Your pages were fairly short - I seem to recall seeing some with 3 lines apiece. The game wasn't long (in regards to page #) at all either, and the combination of the two makes it look like you don't put effort into your storygames regardless of how accurate that statement actually is.

Also, I didn't include this in my rating process because that would be wrong, but you should watch what you rate other stories. You give just about everything an 8, while otherwise the normal votes would be a 4.

2/8

THIS Was AWFUKLKLLL IT DDINT EVEN MAKE SENSE NEER PLAYING VEVER AGAIN

THIS THANG SUCKS CUCUMBERS

it sucks ass

Very chaotic,i like it

This is the best game ever

i love this

boring

I changed my mind!!!!!!!

WHY IS THIS GAME SO SHORT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!