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On a closer reread, I have to wonder if this is a troll game. It was pointed out to me that the grammar / sentence is actually fine, far better than what would be seen from the usual idiot who somehow doesn't understand that sentences begin with capital letters.

So uh, good job tricking everyone into giving you a 1 and getting your game unpublished? You must be very proud.

No.... Just, No. Learn to capitalise and grammar check, please.

I don't want to be too harsh but, you should definitely learn some grammar...

Very poor in almost every conceivable category

I'm extremely sorry to say this, but your game was pathetic. You didn't capitalize the first letter of sentences, and it contained many grammatical errors. Please, work on this story and make it better as it is in a hideous state right now. Hire some beta-testers if you want some feedback, and whatnot.

1/8. Merry Christmas to you as well, and have a Happy New Year!

Don't make awful stories. Just don't do that. It's not hard at all. If you don't want to put in even the slightest amount of effort, just don't make anything at all. If you can honestly play this and think "Yes, this is a good story," then I pity you. This is something that even your mother wouldn't be proud to put on the fridge.

There are many resources on the internet for learning English. There are also books, made of paper. The marks printed within them can usually be trusted to resemble what words and sentences are supposed to look like.

I'd recommend going away and looking into any of these resources, but mostly the part where you go away.

Apart from the technical flaws, there is one thing I find quite annoying. The first set of choices you give in the game has both answers being 'wrong'. Or, rather, you shame the player for picking either choice, and those are the only choices present. Pretty much the whole game is wrong choices; there is no right choice. Now, this might work in a certain kind of game, but you have to have enough detail to make such a rigged journey enjoyable, and you have failed to do this. While some aspects of the game might be cute (jellyfish are cute), there isn't enough going on to really recommend this to anyone.

Oh okay.

Merry Christmas to you too.