Player Comments on Escape The School!

This game certainly offers a good number of choices, but the choices didn't really feel exciting or well developed. I appreciate that there is some attempt to branch, but the transitions between pages weren't quite as smooth as they might be.

More importantly, the author will want to work on character--this is hard stuff, and people do not get this in their first, or even second game, necessarily. But spending time on developing interesting characterization, well-written dialogue, and subtle nonverbal actions of the people you meet will make the reader care about them. More importantly, it will make the reader know why they are choosing things--why I like this person instead of that person.

That takes work, and slow attention to detail and dialogue. You have talent, and this is a good foundation. I expect remarkable things to grow out of this. Keep writing.

Cool and short

This story is a fun, short pleasant adventure. I love both paths and think that this game is just like a cute little cherry.

The plot overall made sense. Some links didn't make sense, but I'll let it slide because I enjoyed the game so much.

The grammar was surprisingly pleasant, and the overall characters were okay. A lot more of the random choice games are popping up that are funny, and this one is no exception — good job, you did well for what I think is your first story game.

I loved it

This is a fun little adventure, and it had me questioning how on earth the protagonist made it nearly the entire year at this school with how quick they are to expel him. (In a good way)

Errors were not blatant and rampant, and so I was allowed to enjoy the story. Thanks for writing this.

Interesting story not very good choices

Lol unfriended her after getting her help to escape.

This wasnt actually too bad for a first attempt, not too many errors.

The choices could have been a bitter involved tho, like there were a lot focusing on not accidentally pissing off Lori.

The rest of the choices were okay even if they did come across as weird behaviors...although I suppose you gotta lose somehow!

Anyways, hope to see more work from you.