Player Comments on Everlasting Darkness

This wasn't horrible, the author clearly put some effort in but at the same time, there were some issues. The author sometimes attempted to use a multitude of adjectives which gave the impression that he thesaurus hunted and at other times seemed too rush to proofread. In addition, the character motivation was entirely unclear. Why did the vampire suddenly fall in love with me? I knew her for a grand total of one hour. Also, it was unclear that I wasn't a vampire from the start, as the description page leads me to believe that I am. Furthermore, it was unrealistic how simple it was to find out and how my character didn't struggle with the thought that the girl he'd just gone home with was a vampire... Seriously, how was that not more shocking to him? It felt very thrown together and like the author was trying to advance the plot, not trying to immerse the reader.

very good

Please make a second part to this!

This was very sad and predictable. Made 5 moves. Died.

"This is directed at a male audience so females beware!"...yeah, it probably isn't a great idea to tell your audience that you're excluding nearly half of them from reading it. Just a heads up, it's pretty unprofessional.

The formatting and grammar was pretty bad towards the beginning, but incredibly it improved towards the end. In fact, after you become a vampire the story gets better. I have no idea why that would be the case. Maybe the author became a prolific vampire writer in real life or something.

After that, the story shuffles forward a bit and bounces between a bunch of dead-end routes before coming to another end which didn't sit well with me either. Eh, it could be better but there were some parts which were good enough.

It doesn't have a lot of choices, and I could only find one ending. (Other than death)

It was good! I rated it even better than recess cups. It was short for my liking, but I am wondering in I should try again...

This game gives you no choice! How is this a "choose your own adventure game" when the only choice is to do what the author wants you to do or die? Stay away from the story. Stay faaaaar away.

To short but amusing momentarily

Both awful endings good story base

That ending wasn't so bad. Either way the story should have been longer. I liked it though.

A decent well written story. I wish there was more content of this standard on the site. I would of liked to see more branching or the stories as it was a little linear at times. It also could have done with a bit more characterisation.

All in all a decent effort. I would like to read more from this author to see if he develops based on this feedback.

bad its not a good game its like smoking weed

Wasn't bad. Although you had to choose certain ways or die almost automatically

quite good.

not bad not bad

It was cool.

Meh, okay but a bit boring in some scenes.

BEST HUMAN ENDING EVAR!!!!!!!! Meow! Oh and can you try to make a neko story? (Look up neko on google.) Email me.

An amazing story deserving of at least a 6/8 and probably a 7/8 isn't out of the question.

I like this one. It's good and quite touching actually. Proves that even monsters like vampires have hearts and are good! ;) :)

Not bad at all. Could use a better storyline/plot. More killing and items would've been nice too. I had fun though.

Very nice, not many mistakes, nicely written and engaging... just wish it was longer

That was really short. Good try, it has a lot of potential.

wow 8/8 lil rough but great nonetheless make a part 2 because i got the prince ending and turned to stone

I turned into a bloodless husk; hahaha

pretty good

6/8

You did ok, certainly not bad. It's a little rough though, so here's to hoping you smooth it out!

Its a little shorter then i thought it would be but its good nonetheless ^^

Very nice story. Plunging into it again to find out the other endings...

Good a few grammar mistakes but otherwise perfect good storyline...Make a second one!

it was okay the pregnant part was little too much for this state.

Got to an ending with only one death. This was pretty good, lil rough but not bad at all.

I liked it I think you should add to it, expand with more choices

@ Bo, ALL WOMEN are crazy, it's just that some are crazier than others and how rotten your luck is.

I read the story fully, and I found it exceptionaly considering its your first story. The Number one problem with this story, and this is a big one, is that there are generly only two links and far more often then not one gets you killed. its ok to have alot of death pages but they need to be outweiged by choices that take you somewhere. The other thing is that these are far from traditional vampires in this story, it urks me a bit. If you wanted to change it up, you shoulda changed it up alot and called them something completely different.

Ugh, why do all the women in my life turn out to be crazy? At least I only get shot a couple of times ;p

I am Bringer roof the Golden Age on the Island

SECRET ENDING!!!

We Are the Champions, We Are the Champions, We are the Champions... I won the vampire king and queen of primavera ending

I didn't think too much about it when i tried, like meh. Another dating game or something but it was better than i expected. Loved the characters and everything about it..

I love it. Awesome plot and the ending was vague and purposefull just the way i like it.

I enjoyed it, though I felt the quality of it dropped a bit further into the story.

I got the non-vampire ending...eventually lol.