Player Comments on Failing

Haha great fun :D A good level of imagination, a bit of healthy insanity and fast-paced writing makes this a great read, the evolution of the character did seem a little unrealistic but it's not a realistic story and a bit like a mini-action movie can be enjoyed just for the thrills for 15 mins, good work :D

Wish it didn't end on a cliffhanger.
I found your game to be pretty great, although some of the expressions you used felt rather odd to me.

The fact that James is a murderer and the initial madness he experiences seems to fade after a while. Maybe that is an intentional move on your part to show that he has more pressing things to worry about? It makes the start and the end of the story seem rather disconnected, but that might be just me.
I did have and good time playing the game.

Not bad actually. Could have been fleshed out a bit more, I really enjoyed the concept of a wanted man trying to survive while it lasted.

I liked where the story path I was on was going.

This was actually very good. There are plenty of spelling mistakes (piece vs peace)but you wouldn't actually hear them if you'd read this out loud so I don't mind that much. What I do mind is that this ends in a cliffhanger, basically out of nowhere. I understand that you're busy, but why publish it already? That was a bit odd. Other than that it's not too linear, you usually get a couple of options but sometimes there's just no option in the game because 2/3 options eventually lead to the same page and then you die. I did love the little hints and sort of half-epilogues you got when you died because they give you additional information about the characters. About the plot.. It was weird. Just plain weird, odd, maybe intriguing, and lots of gore. I did feel like halfway through the story there was a shift between killer madness vs actually sensible person, I'm not sure why you did that. Maybe to make him seem more human? It was a little too vulgar for me, but eh, you described things well, thinking about sound/smell and giving clear hints before a choice. Overall, this was pretty solid.

Great story. Only my second story read, but still a great one! The length was good, as was your style and description of writing. I honestly hope you write more stories in the future, because I absolutely adored this one!
6/8

Well done.