Player Comments on Fugitive Hearts
I feel like the author needs to take a step back and not be in such a hurry to rush these out.
This is longer than the last one with a lot more to do, so that part's an improvement, but I was spotting some pretty iffy grammar and the formatting is so inconsistent. Everything mashed together into giant fat paragraphs with no line breaks for dialogue in some places, with huge gaps in other.
The page Life's Going Down the Drain didn't allow me to use the item I had and didn't have any links to leave. I'm also not sure of some of the other items, one in particular which felt very out of place but also was unusable, with the game ending immediately after to prevent it from being used anywhere else.
Then there's the actual plot, which doesn't have much logic to it. You're in a crowded building with dozens of agents ready to bust into a room and shoot you in an instant, but they're nowhere in sight and there are no bodyguards or any other kind of staff when these two ambassadors from countries that dislike each other are having a loud and heated argument, followed by a murder suicide? This is the reason for the entire plot and it just doesn't hold up to scrutiny very well.
Oh, and then there was that magical sparkly unicorn that killed me in the sewer and ended the game. (I got the magical horn as an item at least? Yay? But it did nothing. Aww...)
on 1/20/2018 11:52:11 PM with a score of 0