Player Comments on Full moon's night

The idea of the storygame was okay, but I think that it could be elaborated upon. I liked the riddles, but they were a little easy and there should be more than just two. It was enjoyable nonetheless, so I think it is a good start.

I like how the author's word choice and portrayal gave the storygame an old and magical feeling, as if it really was in a dark forest. More attention and effort should have been placed into proofreading this, because there was a lot of punctuation errors that (unfortunately) took away from the storygame's worth.

The plot moves along smoothly, but I don't like that it came to such a quick ending. I understand that the author was on a deadline, but if they truly cared about writing their story and doing well in the contest, it would have been finished before the contest was even close to over and might have possibly won if it was longer and more story was put behind the idea.

Really like the writing here and the dark, twistedly beautiful fairy-tale feel of the story. It's nice to read a storygame that focuses on setting atmosphere rather than throwing you into the thick of what's going on, and you did that quite well.

The plot is linear, but it works. Yet I can't help but think that if you did a few branching pathways, it might fit in very well with the forest theme. Lots of potential here you could definitely expand on.

I loved the writing itself, it's just a shame you couldn't proofread it. Lots of missing punctuation, etc. I know there was a deadline, but unless you were just riiight on the wire with it, reading over a story of this length and slap down some periods wouldn't have taken too long. That's really my only major complaint, though. The setting, from the first couple of sentences on is just dripping with atmosphere, and I love the fairy tale logic at play here. The realization at the end of just who the two who gave you the riddles had been was a nice one, and in a story about riddles it seemed fitting you didn't actually spell it out.

If this were ever expanded into a longer story I'd of course appreciate having more choices beyond just the answers to the riddles, but what's here, works.

This is interesting, and very easy to get wrapped up in. Bravo!

Full Moon's Night had a lot of parts that almost captivated me.

The narration had many elements that were beautiful. The confusion and otherworldliness was notable, bit there was also quite a bit that really broe up the immersion. The biggest of these was when "you" was referenced several times early on. If there is going to be a "you" in the story, it had better be the guy whom I am making choices for, else I am going to be rereading passages because I am unsure of what is going on and wondering when the point of view is going to switch. "You" never did get to make the choices. This issue alone, if fixed, would have improved my experience reading the story immensely.

I found the setting of the story very interesting and enjoyed reading and finding out more about it. The general impression of it that I got as I read was that of an old fairy-tale and very suitable.

The story itself was quite linear. There were a few premature death/madness end links, and that was all before the end. On the one hand, this made it easy to read everything, but on the other hand, it eliminated a lot of replay value.

Overall, this was an eerie and delightful story that cold have been even more.

Pretty good

The writing itself was pretty good. This author knows how to describe interestingly. The punctuation and spacing was all over the place, which made it really hard to read. There were additional spaces and dropped spaces all over the place. Really, this would have been improved if it could be expanded, with more character development and much more attention spent on the conclusion. The dead ends along the way could also have had more interesting detail and description as well. An interesting read, though.

Beautiful little story! Would have loved to have had more interaction with Aspen and had the story continue. Even so, I was greatly pleased with reading this offering and would love to see more from this author.

You get a meh! On the NomNom scale. You're writing was not bad, but the riddles could be improved upon. Also, I would have like there to have been more detail, but well nice try!

Conversion Chart:
yuk!=0-1 stars
eh!=1-1.9 stars
meh...=2-2.9 stars
nom=3-3.9 stars
nomnom=4-4.9 stars
nomnomnom!=5-6 stars

I wish it was longer. I liked the story.

not bad but it could be expanded. the riddles were easy, too easy in fact

This was kind of sweet in it's own way with good use of atmosphere considering the length. A really nice effort

Ehhh... Extremely short.

I enjoyed this story very much! Although there are some grammar and structure mistakes, the idea of the story is great. Although some may be disappointed at the length of the storygame, it's still well paced.

I died on the second riddle, but I will try again. Currently, I only see one path, answer a series of riddles to escape. Maybe to make this deeper you could add more paths?

People once new old things, that we no longer. Doesn't mean that they won't lay blame to you, sooner or later.

I really liked this bilbo. It could have used a good proof-reading, as there were some rather basic grammatical errors on most pages. But as far as the writing itself is concerned, I thought it was a strong story.

While this story was too short to be strong, I did enjoy what I read. I liked the setting and the description of the forest, even if it made Adelaide look very bland in comparison. The two riddles were okay, although I found them to be very easy. Unfortunately, there was hardly any story and not much of a game – if there was a lot more similar writing I could give this a good rating, but due to its lack of content, I can only give the game 3/8.

I would have rated this higher if only it were longer! What's there is excellent - the writing really builds the atmosphere of a dark magical forest, and the riddles fit perfectly into this theme without being overly challenging. All in all, the entire story read like a Grimm fairy tale, with a gothic and dream-like quality that I really enjoyed.

It is still very linear, though, and ends almost as soon as you really begin to have fun. I also realize that it was written on a very limited timeframe, so I would love to see this story expanded upon in the future, hopefully!

This wasn't very hard. I passed it easily. :)

I really liked this game... while it was linear and very easy to beat, the riddles were unique, and it was well written. Great game! I got all the riddles correct the very first time! :)