Halo, or Hell, no!

Player Rating?/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length?/8

"Unknown / Not Set"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Recent Activity: Maybe working on this again?

 

Would you prefer to be an angel or a demon after you've died? Would you rather be a bloodthirsty warlord or a powerful magic caster? In this storygame, you have many choices that will greatly impact the flow of the story, with a unique path for each new branch. 

Notes:
Your score represents the ending you got.
I should mention that the first two choices offered in the set of four you receive result in a game-end. They are simple endings that do not represent the length of the rest of the story. They are there simply for smaller ideas that do not reflect the rest of the story.

A quick warning: there are quite a few vivid descriptions of you dying (there's quite a few ways to die as well), so if you're not cool with that, get gud skrub.

 

Special Thanks:
Gower for the title.
Mizal and Chef for their great advice.
Shadowdrake and Reader for their amazing critque and proofreading.
 

Player Comments

WARNING: SPOILERS

I really liked it! I chose to temporarily not leave a rating, since it's unfinished. The writing is of a very high quality, in my opinion. The premise of the piece (as well as the diversity of choices offered at the very beginning) was quite interesting.

I'm not sure if you plan to have four separate routes or if you initially intended for both the human and purgatory routes to immediately end, but I'd be interested in seeing these routes expanded upon more. Though I did like how you cleverly worked the big bang into the purgatory ending. I'd love to read this project when it is finished. Best of luck!
-- Reader82 on 11/22/2019 7:11:58 PM with a score of 0
It was fantabulous, even for an unfinished story game, it was one of the best I have read in a while. I really liked the openness and the concept of you being able to choose your own afterlife. This concept would be good for anisogamy and would make it really interesting, but your writing style really emphasized it and amplified it making it really good.
I really enjoyed your game and it was very unique. Your title was nicely written and matches the story game perfectly. I encourage you to continue on with your story game and keep on writing and diving into it. It has a lot of potential and could honestly in my opinion if you kept on working on it, be one of the top 5 games on this site.
As you can tell by now I really, really enjoyed your story game and honestly, I find it hard to critique you on anything. But here’s what I got like Zake said be consistent in your choices is you list something in order keep it in that same order it will make it easier for the average CYAoan reader. If I’m going to be honest were not all that smart. When your fully finished with your story, proofread it. Believe just a few spelling and grammar errors could tick anybody on a writing website off. Make it easier on yourself and the rest of the community by proofreading it yourself to make sure you wrote down what you wanted. Also, when have other people proofread some other perspectives won’t hurt that much.
But for the most part your story absolutely rocks, and I love the idea. Overall, I personally think you should delve deeper in and write more. But if your looking to write a shorter story go ahead and do that. Just have other people proofread it when its fully finished.
-- Davefaster on 9/4/2019 1:04:10 PM with a score of 0
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