Player Comments on High School Romance

Your very first game… and from a long time ago. How does it have so few comments? No matter, I’m here to put my two cents in. I have to admit, though, this is going to be tough: with the setup you’ve given in the comment and on the first page, I’m not getting my hopes up too high for this one, and I think that’s the point now. Well, if this shall be an example for others, I’ll attempt to help by attempting to clearly point out things that I think can be improved.

First page: “Hey, this is my first game.” You know, I get why people put that there. In fact, I’m pretty sure I have used almost those exact words. But that actually gets old quite quickly. After all, this story appears to be 12 years old when I’m writing this comment, and it will just get older. Again, I understand why people write that, but unless you’re sure you’re going to take the story down in a few days, I think that actually takes away from the story – it sets the story up for failure before we even start reading.

It’s a fair setup on the first page. I do really like that I’ve got a lot of options on the first page. SO many stories start out the first page with a link to the second page, so this is very nice for a choose your own story site. But that page could be developed a bit more to give hints or clues. I get that I don’t have a date and I’m shy, but I’m not completely sure which is my best avenue for success with these choices. Maybe that’s the point, but I like to perhaps have a little tiny hint or two as to which choices might work out better for me.

I went all out and for Kelly. My story ended quite quickly. It was nice that there was a pretty clear hint on that second page that I was going to go down in flames! That’s what I’m talking about when I mentioned little hints to help the reader select the option that will succeed. Playing again, I’m not sure I liked the colored dialogue. It is nice that it is clear when someone else is talking, but the red font confused me at first. I did manage to get the date, but only after clicking through a bit.

It was a nice, very short story. It does show potential and others who read this should be inspired by this as a starting point!
-- Ogre11 on 5/6/2018 10:54:14 PM with a score of 0
Hey I liked your game it was kinda hard but also it was very short. If you make a new one can you make it longer plz?
-- Josilyn on 2/15/2020 7:18:37 PM with a score of 0
This was short, but honestly just super cute.

Definitely you would give this an 8 as it brought enlightenment to my soul. ??
-- Kiri on 1/14/2020 5:35:27 AM with a score of 0
It's really good, but too short
-- RJ on 1/9/2020 6:03:20 PM with a score of 0
i fucked shawna

no jk
-- lol on 1/4/2020 10:17:55 PM with a score of 0
no bueno
-- no on 12/18/2019 7:23:49 PM with a score of 0
Not that bad
-- Frenia on 11/16/2019 5:38:03 AM with a score of 0
I guess I enjoy the fact that I can get Rachel and Shawna, but pissed that Kelly won't even look my way
-- EasiFawn on 11/1/2019 8:12:02 PM with a score of 0
Cool
-- Talia on 10/4/2019 4:55:51 PM with a score of 0
I like you so much
-- victoria on 9/30/2019 9:54:49 PM with a score of 0
I REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY REALLY LOVED IT
-- Jjlove12 on 9/20/2019 11:30:02 AM with a score of 0
Well it is good maybe
-- Evan Larson on 8/22/2019 7:12:49 PM with a score of 0
Just fabulous
-- Alex on 8/2/2019 6:04:06 PM with a score of 0
Hi! It was great but you should TOTALLY make it longer! It was awesome, but then I got disappointed when it ended so quickly! Please consider, I'm sure others feel the same. No hate, and keep up the good work!
-- Me on 6/8/2019 12:04:49 AM with a score of 0
bleh its boreing
-- mariene on 5/11/2019 5:18:57 PM with a score of 0
This was a great game and I really enjoyed, but can you choose more girls to go on a date with? I would really appreciate it
-- Unicornstar001 on 4/28/2019 10:11:51 AM with a score of 0
Its awesome, but can you add more endings?
-- Jacob on 4/22/2019 5:53:58 AM with a score of 0
it sucked
-- emily on 4/8/2019 1:01:55 PM with a score of 0
Good Job! I'm impressed by this considering that it was your first time.
-- Brianna on 4/3/2019 5:40:21 PM with a score of 0
I like it I would not reamend it tho
-- Lie on 3/27/2019 2:13:04 PM with a score of 0
i didn't get the point of this game
-- not telling you on 2/27/2019 10:17:30 PM with a score of 0
OMG so great. You know, mabie that will happen to me somday ;)
-- Saaaaaauuuuukkk TRAILER on 2/25/2019 7:33:48 PM with a score of 0
A bit short i want to know what hapens after she says yrs...
-- Bbb on 2/22/2019 3:16:10 AM with a score of 0
Luved it! Very interesting to know what would happen if you did or didn’t do something.
-- Crystal Rose on 2/16/2019 1:40:32 PM with a score of 0
ok so the only reason i said it was slightly better than homework is because 1 there is nothing ti look at 2 its very shot and i no ur probly working on another one bou like at least put some other things than those choices and endings
-- a person on 2/10/2019 6:55:01 PM with a score of 0
Ah not the best but pretty good maybe some picture`s would help.
-- cate on 2/1/2019 4:25:57 PM with a score of 0
u friggen suc, ur choices r really douchey, no 1 would talk to a guy like dat, Rachel isn't funny, and learn how to write axehole. Also, ur plot is crud. -yeeeeet
-- NO on 1/13/2019 10:25:24 PM with a score of 0
it would be better if dress up your person
-- mystry person on 1/10/2019 11:45:05 AM with a score of 0
Basic
-- Egg on 1/7/2019 2:41:00 AM with a score of 0
Really great, but it could be a little longer. I gave it a 7/8.
-- A. on 12/28/2018 10:20:59 PM with a score of 0
the worst game ever
-- jacklevop liuyt on 12/28/2018 3:03:12 PM with a score of 0
It was kind of a cute story, but I wish it had more depth and juiciness, ya know? But, this is your first story, so I guess it's okay for the very first.
-- Anonymous on 12/28/2018 1:57:09 PM with a score of 0
Love It
-- Ella on 12/24/2018 2:24:47 AM with a score of 0
too short
-- faith on 12/22/2018 1:33:00 AM with a score of 0
Its good, well plot and it shows if you not good or in the game you will never win. Points for that but what it needed is depth something more than a simple can you go out with. MAKE IT RISE MORE
-- vicky on 12/7/2018 4:46:45 AM with a score of 0
Too easy
-- Lollypop on 12/2/2018 9:32:37 PM with a score of 0
It was interesting, however not much of a story there. You either get a date or you don't, the end. On the positive side, you can redo the story a bunch of times and it still would take more than 5 minutes. I am sure as you write more stories you will get better, I do see potential.
-- Francesca1986 on 10/2/2018 5:26:05 PM with a score of 0
I love this it’s so cute I wish it continued I wanted to find out what happened later.
-- Plasma on 9/10/2018 8:16:07 AM with a score of 0
Too short, terrible
-- squishy on 9/10/2018 12:30:44 AM with a score of 0
fun game. easy... maybe to easy. a little short
-- Crystal on 9/2/2018 1:14:48 PM with a score of 0
I really like this game. It gives you an idea of how a boy might ask you to a dance.
-- Mae on 9/1/2018 4:36:55 AM with a score of 0
It was good wish it was longer tho
-- Bailey on 8/31/2018 1:38:33 PM with a score of 0
I want a female version plz.
-- Rachel on 8/27/2018 11:00:55 PM with a score of 0
It is not really that fun but I didn't have much of a choice. But I am sure that if you keep going and making choose your story games it is positive that your games like these will become more thrilling! You can do it!!!
-- Bella on 8/27/2018 12:57:00 PM with a score of 0
it too short
-- bob on 8/18/2018 11:40:29 PM with a score of 0
not even romantic,,,
-- Why should i tell u on 8/18/2018 6:03:38 PM with a score of 0
a bit short
-- hi on 7/30/2018 6:08:36 AM with a score of 0
wow not what i expected but in a good way
-- ava on 7/27/2018 6:22:19 AM with a score of 0
i think it should be longer and with more romance in it. Maybe even more stories
-- laila on 7/11/2018 9:49:58 AM with a score of 0
Great Game! This was worth the time!
-- hi on 6/22/2018 10:03:01 PM with a score of 0
It was really good. But it is obviously better than mine. I don't know how to make one!
-- thisisme on 6/14/2018 4:08:43 PM with a score of 0
its boring because its not long enough
-- Zaquirah on 6/11/2018 10:43:28 AM with a score of 0
Awesome story!
But I am not a boy...keep writing??
-- Anime_girl on 6/3/2018 3:25:02 PM with a score of 0
hey can we more of those please
-- lucy on 5/17/2018 10:25:10 AM with a score of 0
It was a bit short
-- Bobby on 5/5/2018 4:23:51 AM with a score of 0
I got it right the second time
-- boden on 4/30/2018 3:34:03 PM with a score of 0
great
-- Amanda Moore on 4/26/2018 2:44:44 PM with a score of 0
Short and sweet, just like Rachel
-- barrycarter on 3/28/2018 4:08:56 PM with a score of 0
good story
-- McKenna on 3/10/2018 10:12:49 AM with a score of 0
Hey I loved it it was simple yet hard thanks ????????
-- Rae on 2/22/2018 2:12:46 AM with a score of 0
noice
-- yboidagoat on 2/7/2018 6:12:58 PM with a score of 0
It's good.
-- Mr. Doodlebird on 1/24/2018 9:18:06 AM with a score of 0
It is great. I know it was hard to make but I wish that it was longer. Also maybe more characters and have scenes actually at the dance. I kinda wanted to go alone and meet someone there...
-- wowlookaname on 1/15/2018 12:26:13 AM with a score of 0
this made me feel idk i love the feeling that he kept telling her more and more info bout his self i mean i would love it if my crush gray winfree acted like that with me wow i just wantedd to celebrate reading all this wow!
-- penelope on 1/10/2018 9:46:06 AM with a score of 0
Great but wished there was more!
-- Emilien on 1/2/2018 12:59:26 AM with a score of 0
It’s a little short; but other than that it’s not bad.
-- FN1-287 on 12/22/2017 1:04:48 AM with a score of 0
Loved it,!,
-- Gigi on 12/17/2017 4:41:23 PM with a score of 0
this was enjoyable. i guess
-- jany on 12/13/2017 10:45:03 AM with a score of 0
Well, It'd be a lot better if it was longer. But at least ya tried, bud!
-- KelanIsGod on 12/3/2017 10:01:45 PM with a score of 0
this game is so so so so so so so so stupid
-- hi on 11/18/2017 2:22:21 PM with a score of 0
NeverMind I got one!
-- Shadow on 11/10/2017 6:24:20 PM with a score of 0
I love this but um...I haven't gotten a stinking date yet.Not like I need one..Right? LOVE'D IT!
-- Shadow on 11/10/2017 6:23:01 PM with a score of 0
Nice. But short so actually trashy.??
-- Anna on 11/5/2017 1:55:51 PM with a score of 0
i loved it sike boring ass hell
-- i kjfhf on 10/25/2017 6:42:10 PM with a score of 0
You need to make it more exciting but I liked it but I think it needs more
-- Beth on 10/18/2017 10:20:38 AM with a score of 0
its crap
-- ....... on 10/5/2017 7:21:33 PM with a score of 0
It was very good, but it was too short, i would like if it had more depth in it, but overall it would make for a very good game
-- Chaos Knight on 9/1/2017 12:56:36 PM with a score of 0
"you seem like my kind of guy" :'( *sigh* i was RPing a lesbian lol
-- AzurasWisdom on 8/7/2017 7:23:42 AM with a score of 0
It wasn't the greatest game more quick and a little boring because there wasn't detailed things nor was the game even long it was amazingly short.
-- Lonely one on 7/6/2017 8:53:19 PM with a score of 0
ya it coool
-- bob.com on 6/29/2017 8:49:21 PM with a score of 0
it was no fun no visual things not a real game
-- dede on 6/23/2017 5:00:54 PM with a score of 0
For what it's worth, a good game! Considering this was your first, it doesn't really matter that it was so short, the realism was at least there. Good job!
-- Kingdomville on 6/8/2017 3:09:49 AM with a score of 0
It was fun

-- Magdalyn on 6/6/2017 12:07:37 AM with a score of 0
I hate it
-- Chris on 5/31/2017 1:39:01 PM with a score of 0
it was kinda boring
-- hello on 5/30/2017 8:34:57 PM with a score of 0
Amazing love it make some more you are an awesome author
-- Anna on 5/27/2017 3:46:57 PM with a score of 0
was that all?
-- lilli on 5/23/2017 11:12:28 PM with a score of 0
boring
-- no on 5/13/2017 7:14:44 PM with a score of 0
then worst app in da book
-- Samore on 5/11/2017 3:49:55 PM with a score of 0
Good
-- Puglover on 5/3/2017 5:49:27 PM with a score of 0
Good
-- Kyle on 4/29/2017 5:08:06 PM with a score of 0
GREAT LOVE ALL THE DRAMA KEEP MAKING MORE PLZ!!!!!!!!!!!! ps:plz make them longer!
-- Yurio on 4/29/2017 10:20:24 AM with a score of 0
really funny but short
-- yo on 4/25/2017 2:47:06 PM with a score of 0
it was funny but SUPER SHORT!!!
-- no one in particular on 4/18/2017 7:03:34 PM with a score of 0
pretty good
-- hfhfjgj on 4/16/2017 4:43:28 PM with a score of 0
I DID IT HELL YEAH
-- Khyrah on 4/15/2017 7:08:56 PM with a score of 0
good
-- bob on 4/12/2017 3:48:01 PM with a score of 0
thats a really cool game to play if you want to ask somebody out to the dance
-- Thobela on 4/10/2017 5:17:05 AM with a score of 0
Ok, should be longer
-- Kk on 4/5/2017 3:20:04 PM with a score of 0
too short
-- anaa on 3/25/2017 9:37:34 AM with a score of 0
it was funny
-- lily on 3/18/2017 10:53:23 AM with a score of 0
it was absoloutley rubbish what was the whole point of the story on the stag option
-- Lunchisthebest on 3/12/2017 8:57:51 AM with a score of 0
Cool story! I like it!
-- Sam2 on 3/9/2017 5:13:47 AM with a score of 0
You could make it a bit longer.
-- dshelton004 on 3/8/2017 5:00:04 PM with a score of 0
It's boring non fun at all you don't get many choices and it goes by fast.
-- Ashlynne on 2/25/2017 6:45:41 PM with a score of 0
Great story! I wish it were longer, though, because it's really good! Maybe you could make part 2 of this...?
-- Katrina on 2/21/2017 1:44:46 PM with a score of 0
Ok..so I liked it, but it was short. ;-; I wanted to continue!!!
-- Orion on 2/14/2017 9:43:50 PM with a score of 0
I have done it 3 times and I loved it every time
-- hihihi on 1/25/2017 5:10:53 PM with a score of 0
Good job
-- Hihihi on 1/25/2017 4:57:30 PM with a score of 0
It could have been longer then It would have been beter
-- Faith on 1/20/2017 2:46:19 AM with a score of 0
Good for ur first story... Congrats I give you 9/10 stars!
-- 2017 Reader on 1/16/2017 8:12:46 PM with a score of 0
great story
-- Kyle Evans on 1/15/2017 4:55:05 PM with a score of 0
Awesome ending! It took me a while to figure it out, but it was worth it!
-- barnesyboy333 on 1/4/2017 9:35:09 PM with a score of 0
really good for your first go! just what i was looking for!
-- koolkatkid on 1/3/2017 2:29:29 AM with a score of 0
amazing story
-- emma on 1/2/2017 5:35:45 PM with a score of 0
its kind of short, and i was hoping for more, but its good!
-- Ang on 1/2/2017 8:53:20 AM with a score of 0
It is so call I found a girlfriend
-- Jay on 1/1/2017 4:25:18 PM with a score of 0
Kelly needs a chance or there is no point and no challenge
-- Chris on 12/26/2016 1:14:16 AM with a score of 0
It was a little short and I saw the ending of the path I chose from a mile away. However, it did have a well-written composition and was thought through
-- . on 12/22/2016 11:18:12 PM with a score of 0
This game is so stupid!
-- Alex on 12/18/2016 7:19:44 PM with a score of 0
i like it love choose your story games so this was pretty fun to do
-- ariyanna on 12/17/2016 2:14:41 PM with a score of 0
It sucked because it was literally two questions.
-- ava on 12/13/2016 4:42:33 PM with a score of 0
it was pretty good but it should be longer
-- lilly on 12/9/2016 10:19:45 AM with a score of 0
Not very many date options right from the beginning. I chose to go alone cuz I hoped I'd have an option of a guy once I got there, but you just moaned about my choice.
-- BYou y Byby on 11/29/2016 1:19:09 AM with a score of 0
Okay. I asked Shawna to go out, clicked on a couple options, and the next thing you know, we're gay. Thanks a lot.
-- Chloe on 11/29/2016 12:33:39 AM with a score of 0
no picture this suck never ever play this xoxoxo
-- sandy on 11/28/2016 1:42:19 PM with a score of 0
its boring
-- petra on 11/28/2016 11:40:51 AM with a score of 0
Nice story!
-- Voltage on 11/28/2016 12:44:56 AM with a score of 0
Short
-- Brooke on 11/27/2016 8:10:59 PM with a score of 0
Is the character a boy or girl?
-- kc40140 on 11/19/2016 3:39:13 PM with a score of 0
I actually quite enjoyed it. I bet everyone says it's really really short in story. If your willing to make more "Pick your own path" romance stories, then count me in!
-- Ryan Vang on 11/6/2016 12:18:21 AM with a score of 0
You are good at making these, but I think you should make one for girls to.
-- Abby on 10/28/2016 6:48:24 AM with a score of 0
It was over in less than a minute
-- Amelia on 10/26/2016 12:12:59 AM with a score of 0
i liked it
-- XerxesXD on 10/6/2016 9:37:06 PM with a score of 0
it was so cool!
-- Amy Byce on 10/3/2016 6:16:59 PM with a score of 0
it was meh...
-- nobody important on 9/21/2016 4:38:17 PM with a score of 0
The game was really good to play in my spare time and I had fun playing it.
-- poo on 8/29/2016 6:39:27 PM with a score of 0
it needs to be longer i am looking for real romance like a long MAKE OUT or SEX add those things
-- jasmine smith on 8/28/2016 9:51:35 PM with a score of 0
short,sweet and to the point.
-- Firestar17_16_15 on 8/17/2016 7:16:47 PM with a score of 0
its okay
-- magic land on 7/19/2016 11:11:00 AM with a score of 0
Too short had promise at first
Then ended 2 minutes in
-- Belsnickel on 7/14/2016 1:28:23 AM with a score of 0
It was pretty good but it finished too quickly!
-- Evie on 6/24/2016 4:16:38 AM with a score of 0
Why is it bad to go stag?
-- Turbotorque on 6/15/2016 7:02:07 PM with a score of 0
Great game, I love how you can end up with Rachel and Shawna
-- Summer on 6/9/2016 4:08:33 PM with a score of 0
I think it's great! It took me a little while to get it right but when I did I just wanted to play it more! I really like how you worded everything! How do I get this game?
-- Summer on 6/9/2016 4:04:48 PM with a score of 0
It okay
-- Katie on 6/8/2016 10:33:37 PM with a score of 0
I LOVE this game
-- Katy on 6/8/2016 1:31:12 PM with a score of 0
Haha this was hilarious!
I'm actually a straight girl and i was really bored but this was fun!
You should make one for girls.
-- A girl on 5/20/2016 10:17:04 PM with a score of 0
It was good. Just wish it was longer
-- Ya boy on 5/18/2016 6:57:42 PM with a score of 0
Although it was really short but hey this isn't worst at all for a first timer. Keep it up and just make some more stories a little longer. :)
-- SimplyKatie on 5/10/2016 10:36:38 PM with a score of 0
I think that if you only go for one option, it seems too short, but after I tried all of them out, I enjoyed it! ???????????? I like that you end up with Shawna
-- Kyle on 5/9/2016 8:26:15 AM with a score of 0
huh too short.
-- olivia on 5/3/2016 5:35:31 PM with a score of 0
I think you should not listen to bad comments.you did good it was fun:).
-- kiki on 4/12/2016 8:32:54 PM with a score of 0
I liked it, although it was too short :/
-- MasonJarGuzzi on 3/19/2016 12:57:21 AM with a score of 0
i thought it was really GREAT its just its too short
-- luna heart on 3/18/2016 2:41:05 AM with a score of 0
its way to short and its boring
-- kij on 3/11/2016 7:43:47 PM with a score of 0
it is too short
-- Katelyn on 3/5/2016 4:49:00 PM with a score of 0
It's not good to say the least , should be longer as well .
-- Aaryanna_H on 2/12/2016 1:29:46 PM with a score of 0
Uh. Well, kind of boring.
-- TheHuntress on 2/11/2016 6:35:55 PM with a score of 0
Amazing
-- tcgvvd on 2/5/2016 5:48:23 PM with a score of 0
not anything much, but first try so I guess not the worst
-- kut52 on 1/26/2016 2:48:42 PM with a score of 0
great game
-- veronica on 1/25/2016 11:06:05 PM with a score of 0
Boom! Got gf first try
-- TitanOfShadows on 1/15/2016 3:48:13 AM with a score of 0
Why am I as a girl, doing this lol :$. It's very funny ;)
-- Chrysanthemum on 1/10/2016 9:49:04 AM with a score of 0
hahaha, this is cool, I wish it was that easy for me, otherwise, I would have like 10 girls that I would ask.
-- Shinobi on 12/14/2015 3:50:50 PM with a score of 0
good story
-- whit3boy7street on 12/7/2015 7:18:00 PM with a score of 0
Cool
-- Andrea King on 12/5/2015 12:52:12 PM with a score of 0
I was ok, honestly a bit fast.
-- David on 12/3/2015 2:37:03 PM with a score of 0
it was good.
-- tay on 12/2/2015 10:19:22 PM with a score of 0
I gave this a 5/8, because it was pretty short and there was an occasional spelling mistake. My real rating is something like 5.5, though.
-- igulat on 11/24/2015 5:54:58 PM with a score of 0
nice topic!
please bring it to next level (longer version)
-- ario on 11/23/2015 12:35:33 PM with a score of 0
As short and "bad" as it may be, it makes me laugh. I love it :D
-- PlaguedAnarchy on 9/19/2015 9:08:27 PM with a score of 0
Idk.. Alright I guess
-- Pearl on 8/26/2015 1:48:09 PM with a score of 0
I like it, it's a little short but really cool.
-- Peter on 8/23/2015 7:01:48 AM with a score of 0
Great! But is there a version for girls?
-- Warriorstar on 7/23/2015 5:55:03 PM with a score of 0
they should make one for girls honestly
-- jessica on 7/21/2015 6:17:05 PM with a score of 0
Fine what I expected and very imaginative.
-- Art on 7/4/2015 1:20:53 PM with a score of 0
Longer is all I got to say. I love it
-- Not saying on 6/23/2015 4:01:41 PM with a score of 0
Yeah. Not great, but definitely better than a lot of other romance stories on the site.
-- Xiro on 6/23/2015 1:49:39 PM with a score of 0
So cool
-- EmilyGotStyle on 6/23/2015 1:28:01 PM with a score of 0
4/8 i got racheal to go with me. Its not a bad story so hate to rate low, but too short to give it a good score so you get a 4
-- JinDary on 6/21/2015 3:15:56 PM with a score of 0
You just tuat me how to get a girlfrend
-- I love you on 6/1/2015 4:26:52 PM with a score of 0
You should add the option to date boys. Otherwise nice.
-- purplebunnygirl on 5/12/2015 7:03:18 PM with a score of 0
Short, but really fun.
-- memoriesxfade on 4/25/2015 10:54:01 PM with a score of 0
ugh, so homophobic :( what about the lgbt community? or even if your just a heterosexual girl?
-- name on 4/24/2015 6:16:06 PM with a score of 0
That was a little hard to figure out which one, but very good for a first timer!
-- Wolfina on 4/21/2015 9:21:05 AM with a score of 0
I got a date
-- Jhtv on 4/19/2015 7:25:18 AM with a score of 0
It is awsome I LOVE IT
-- TheAnimePuppy on 4/9/2015 7:36:17 AM with a score of 0
That was great!
-- Anime_Fan on 3/31/2015 7:48:09 PM with a score of 0
It was easy and I love it.
-- brittany2143 on 3/26/2015 3:15:23 PM with a score of 0
It was so stupid, with context that would never fit the real world. Open your eyes to life! Do better, or I will tell all my blog followers not to read your stories!
-- Claire on 3/22/2015 2:01:03 AM with a score of 0
I thought that the point of this story was to be confident...
Until I asked Kelly out.
-- A on 3/21/2015 11:30:31 PM with a score of 0
Humorous and playfull I like it
-- Zaguiza14 on 3/16/2015 6:50:54 PM with a score of 0
I wasn't too good. I'm sure it does work, just not the combination of my answers. :)
-- Hermione on 3/8/2015 7:43:09 AM with a score of 0
wish it were longer
-- ellie on 3/7/2015 9:15:26 PM with a score of 0
That was a really good story,Did you come up with it on you're own?
-- Hetalia_Fan on 2/20/2015 1:56:04 PM with a score of 0
I LOVED YOUR STORY :D #ilovecaps
-- Srinkles on 2/9/2015 12:46:52 AM with a score of 0
I had to retry 3 times
-- jordan on 2/1/2015 12:27:23 AM with a score of 0
Fast and easy to understand I like that
-- hayesa on 1/25/2015 9:54:35 PM with a score of 0
What I've learned from this:
A) I don't seem to know how to ask girls on dates
B) You can make a good story-game that is short
Like you said a few minor drawbacks like telling a reader how to respond at the start of the story but far better than the first story-game (or gamebook) I ever wrote
-- Will11 on 1/14/2015 1:18:26 AM with a score of 0
It was pretty good. I think there should have been more options.
-- Spiritfeather on 1/9/2015 8:58:47 PM with a score of 0
Short. I just realized they always make boy get girl stories instead of girl get boy stories. I guess it sorta makes sense though, if you think about it.
-- Wolfmist on 1/3/2015 4:52:06 PM with a score of 0
Originally I disliked the story. Now, I'm watching it while listening to the soundtrack from Inception. That music makes everything feel epic, so I must rate this 5/8.
-- Malkalack on 12/26/2014 10:11:04 PM with a score of 0
Nice game, really shows how easy it is to get a date in a story game but in real life it is not that easy.
-- Shinobi on 12/11/2014 7:18:18 AM with a score of 0
Hey,
Im finding games for my neighbors,
they are so cute!
Anyways i found this and i was thinking maybe you
could maybe make it longer,
I think it was too short or something like that,
Anyways have a great day,

xoxo Selena
-- Selena Gomez on 12/8/2014 12:15:58 PM with a score of 0
Boring but better then sitting doing homework so ya i guess
-- Savanna Ranerceed on 12/8/2014 12:13:57 PM with a score of 0
It's okay
-- WarriorCatsRPStories on 12/6/2014 3:53:15 PM with a score of 0
awsesommmmee
-- mia on 11/30/2014 2:35:17 PM with a score of 0
I wish it were that easy in real life. Nice!
-- Shinobi on 11/20/2014 10:42:40 PM with a score of 0
Quite a short game, but entertaining. I would love to see an expansion where the player goes to the dance, or gets asked by someone after securing a date with someone else. A good first attempt! :)
-- Vi on 11/10/2014 3:45:11 AM with a score of 0
YAY
-- xXGrimAphelionXx on 11/8/2014 7:12:09 PM with a score of 0
Love it
-- alex on 9/27/2014 1:30:45 AM with a score of 0
really short
-- robert on 9/12/2014 8:43:29 PM with a score of 0
yea imma stud!!!
-- romeo on 9/10/2014 1:59:31 PM with a score of 0
it was really really really short
-- arwendler on 8/18/2014 3:34:06 PM with a score of 0
Off the Chain!
-- Walter on 8/7/2014 5:14:04 PM with a score of 0
It was a short and cute story but could of done with more character development.
-- Madbrad200 on 7/26/2014 8:45:59 AM with a score of 0
I love it I just wish it was longer.
-- KillerQueen15 on 7/25/2014 12:11:57 PM with a score of 0
Utter crap. There is NO storyline, no alternatives or character personalities...just...No...
-- You are not a good story on 7/24/2014 12:57:46 AM with a score of 0
good
-- Legendx on 7/3/2014 11:11:23 PM with a score of 0
This is the very first story I wrote for this site. It's terrible, but I keep it up here to encourage other writers.

Even if your first story sucks as much as this one, you can get better.
-- Sethaniel on 5/27/2014 2:13:46 PM with a score of 0
If u choose that u are going alone then say u r sure it says this:

"You go to the homecoming dance by yourself. And somewhere, miles away, a lonely story writer sighs at the thought of the ENTIRE STORY that you missed."
-- what? on 5/25/2014 10:06:01 AM with a score of 0
Ok do not choose "I'll go stag" If you do she says...
You go to the dance alone and somewhere in the distance a story writer sighs that you missed the whole story
-- WOW on 5/24/2014 9:27:30 AM with a score of 0
So ichose reacheal and if you dont click "hi" she gets sooo mad
-- Anonymous on 5/24/2014 9:22:45 AM with a score of 0
most stupidest game ever, my opinion anyways. way to short, sorry but i dont like it :)
-- Aria on 5/20/2014 7:58:30 PM with a score of 0
its really funny if you ask racheal. (Sorry if i spelt that wrong).

Kelly is a bitch and you can't ask her out anyway. She needs to die, oh wait she would probably go stag because no one but the dumb boys would ask her out
-- AgentS4 on 4/17/2014 2:29:15 AM with a score of 0
Good, but short.
-- Tanstaafl on 4/13/2014 11:03:17 AM with a score of 0
THIS IS WAAAAY TOO SHORT!!!! I was actually getting interested. Seriously, it was great. I WANT MOOOORE!!! But it did kinda hurt when Kelly laughed at me :( LOL I really liked Rachel's ending, and really Shawna's needed more detail. Again, TOO FRIGGIN SHORT!!!
-- sagebrush on 2/27/2014 7:01:37 PM with a score of 0
I have a friend named Rachel Zoe Des "Coco" Chanel irl and i dont want to invite her!
-- RabbitSeason on 1/10/2014 8:50:42 PM with a score of 0
Cute.
-- Soph on 12/30/2013 10:29:36 PM with a score of 0
Got the darn date
-- ;) on 12/27/2013 6:39:38 PM with a score of 0
NICE , NOT THE BEST , TOO SHORT!
-- Losbirro on 11/21/2013 6:30:31 AM with a score of 0
Nice game, wish the character had more choices though.
-- SurvivorMaurader on 11/4/2013 12:27:25 PM with a score of 0
It is acually alright.I like it ;p
-- Jasyjohnson on 10/31/2013 5:59:49 AM with a score of 0
I really enjoyed this, especially with shawna. I kinda have a huge crush on a girl who has become my best friend. But, as of now, we're just friends. This story just speaks to me in a way.
-- Josiah Blizzard on 10/23/2013 1:06:28 PM with a score of 0
I got Shawna!
-- Kelly Sucks on 10/14/2013 8:18:13 PM with a score of 0
really fun game, first time I played it I decided to be SUPER freaking nice and got the new girl as my GF.... then I realised that that was kinda boring... so i then promptly went on an Alpha Male rampage, 'yeah, you can go to the dance with me.' 'I only wanted you cuase another guy wanted you' Etc.

Also, why is everyone complaining about not getting Kelly? The guys just being honest, ya know...
-- Who really cares? on 8/14/2013 10:05:38 PM with a score of 0
Well, needs more penis
-- Nuclearwarfareaw10 on 8/9/2013 4:54:32 AM with a score of 0
Short and sweet. ^-^
-- LittleMissNice on 8/5/2013 10:31:15 PM with a score of 0
Yay! I got a date! My life is complete
-- Skysworne on 7/18/2013 4:54:11 PM with a score of 0
This was cute and fun to do!!! <3
-- Ashley :) on 7/9/2013 9:35:27 PM with a score of 0
I think its to short
-- nun yo buisness on 6/5/2013 3:03:55 PM with a score of 0
I like the game. I just thought that you could add some discriptions about what happened to the dance. But I liked the game.
-- harrypotter on 5/20/2013 9:58:59 PM with a score of 0
Love this game, hoping that there will be
something like Girlfriend Romance. And i love the characters!
-- A Fan on 5/10/2013 3:38:34 PM with a score of 0
Should be something for Kelly
-- Kazuki on 5/9/2013 7:48:38 PM with a score of 0
A bit too brief, and the endings seem to cut you off. Not really much though in it either, pretty vapid.
-- Some Guy on 4/26/2013 3:10:25 AM with a score of 0
It was good I just think you should have had some sort of chance with Kelly.
-- EmperoroftheNorth on 4/2/2013 2:42:51 PM with a score of 0
um... a just a tiny bit WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING HAVING THIS SO SHORT IT WAS SO GOOD! yeah, maybe have it a bit longer, and going into the actual dance and beyond.
-- Psychotikitty on 3/9/2013 9:06:55 PM with a score of 0
This junk is funny.
-- avery2405 on 3/7/2013 8:47:06 PM with a score of 0
Not bad at all, for this type of game. It's short but it's fun experimenting and playing different cards.
-- Millennium on 1/22/2013 11:07:51 AM with a score of 0
Perty Good
-- headroom3 on 1/17/2013 6:15:23 PM with a score of 0
Well written, but as everyone else said, too short... you should revamp it, maybe make it a bit more difficult to get a date, and make some option where you may actually be able to get the popular girl as well.
-- Mercedes on 1/10/2013 11:45:40 AM with a score of 0
I completed this in 15 seconds
Rachael all the way!
-- divinekingsteve on 12/28/2012 3:41:53 PM with a score of 0
great story. loved the ending
-- EragonMax490 on 12/5/2012 2:42:01 PM with a score of 0
Awhh, this was really cute. I really liked the ending where you got to go with your best friend.
-- Briar_Rose on 11/6/2012 5:03:40 PM with a score of 0
Super Cute, Absolutley Lovely
-- Emily on 9/14/2012 1:06:33 PM with a score of 0
LOVED it. It was short and sweet and I asked out shwana
-- Morgan on 8/24/2012 8:17:57 PM with a score of 0
It's worth every cent.... so how about you throw me some change? :D Seriously, I enjoyed this, but it was way too short. Moar! For your first story, this is really good! Seeing as I've read some of your other stories, I know you can make a good one. How about revamping this some time? I'd love to see what you come up with! SEQUEL!!!
-- ChaiHai on 8/15/2012 2:47:59 AM with a score of 0
Cute. Very enjoyable.
-- FeeLynLove24 on 8/3/2012 11:17:40 PM with a score of 0
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay to short
-- katerang717 on 7/22/2012 9:15:57 AM with a score of 0
Short but enjoyable
-- Xt1000305 on 6/20/2012 11:37:50 AM with a score of 0
omg i loved it and if your womndering yes im bi email me back plz laterz grt work make more
-- Katie Joy on 6/13/2012 5:22:44 PM with a score of 0
Shallow waters my friend.
-- CovElite on 6/12/2012 7:03:47 PM with a score of 0
Not bad. I liked it. Could do with more depth to the story.
-- Inconceivable! on 5/17/2012 8:27:02 PM with a score of 0
love it !!!
-- cali on 5/3/2012 12:04:14 AM with a score of 0
Should be longer
-- Asmoro on 4/21/2012 10:19:47 AM with a score of 0
Really short, but i love the effort and story line. has ALOT of potential.
-- Meriko on 3/20/2012 2:06:59 AM with a score of 0
nice story for a first one
-- ZenUndead on 3/13/2012 2:27:05 PM with a score of 0
This was a cool idea. You get to ignore the rejection and the anxiety and just become a character. I'd recommend more girl options and descriptions of the girls. Play upon the teenage boy insecurities like looks or masculinity. How about a rival? (Or maybe I didn't try that option) It was a fun fantasy.
-- wildape on 1/16/2012 10:12:59 AM with a score of 0
It was a good story for each character but you should try making it longer.
-- Fireplay on 11/15/2011 11:27:07 AM with a score of 0
Ok pretty good Sethaniel has way better works though...like Snow...
-- jarvan on 11/11/2011 1:46:29 PM with a score of 0
Short, sweet, and to the point. Okay I guess.
-- Killer999 on 9/23/2011 1:05:31 PM with a score of 0
Too short.
-- Fameless on 9/10/2011 4:48:09 PM with a score of 0
Got the "perfect w/ rachel" ending.... Short and sweet, plus i liked the joke in there... no the best, but DEFINITLY NOT the worst!
-- Kayy on 8/27/2011 2:38:39 PM with a score of 0
it was cool especially the joke for the stag ending pretty funny
-- mily704p on 7/31/2011 12:55:27 PM with a score of 0
Way....way...too short..
-- Coral on 6/28/2011 7:29:33 PM with a score of 0
Good story! short, but good:)
-- Secretstarz7 on 6/28/2011 10:34:34 AM with a score of 0
I played all the paths and I really enjoyed the joke about you sighing miles away.
-- cool74 on 6/6/2011 2:33:48 AM with a score of 0
Bo approves
-- ThisisBo on 5/16/2011 6:06:17 PM with a score of 0
Pretty good.
-- tgsunrise on 4/24/2011 4:24:10 PM with a score of 0
again, good story! needs to be longer...again. but this thing caught my interest and i wanted to try all the endings! hope you write more!
-- fergie14233 on 12/3/2010 9:32:30 PM with a score of 0
good game! but, ya, needs to be longer.
-- fergie14233 on 12/3/2010 9:27:26 PM with a score of 0
Awesome! But needs to be longer.
-- Missy on 11/7/2010 5:26:26 PM with a score of 0
It is really cute. I feel like it ends abruptly- tell us what happens at the dance. I think your writing is good:)
-- SoarHighBeFree on 3/29/2010 11:04:21 PM with a score of 0
Seth, your games leave my speechless.
-- checker444 on 4/10/2009 7:15:52 PM with a score of 0
Short but sweet. I thought it was a very nice first attempt. :)
-- Songbird on 10/28/2008 12:25:56 AM with a score of 0
It would've been nice to actually go to the dance, but for a first game, it was pretty good.
-- Melike on 4/5/2008 3:19:11 PM with a score of 0
Pretty realistic, I'm a good friend that didn't get a date to the dance : (
-- th*mage*of*kings on 1/29/2008 7:46:50 PM with a score of 0
I got dumped. *sniffle*
-- Expander on 1/27/2008 7:03:29 PM with a score of 0
This game is like the stapels button, easy.
-- bobmcbob on 1/24/2008 7:27:32 AM with a score of 0
Okay, this was your first game but, it could've been written better. I hope I can do one.
-- Orin on 10/21/2007 9:15:20 PM with a score of 0
awww that was cute!
-- march5th00 on 6/5/2007 12:56:41 PM with a score of 0
good simple nice fun story made sense -realistic
-- choco on 3/2/2007 11:32:27 PM with a score of 0
Ok
-- banjoman92 on 3/2/2007 7:21:26 PM with a score of 0
Hey! Look at that! a gasme that's pretty good in the love and dating section! Amazing!
-- DarthVader_13 on 2/28/2007 6:13:03 PM with a score of 0
I played this one in thanks for your having rated my quizzes. The whole love-and-dating category isn't really my thing, but... in this game, I got a date to the dance. Hurray! (Seriously though, this seems to be an accurate depiction of high school romance....)
-- Sir_Lancegalawain on 12/9/2006 8:24:52 PM with a score of 0
needsmwork and pictures
-- sam on 12/2/2006 7:04:42 PM with a score of 0
That was nice, but a bit short, good overall.
-- PrinceOProvidence on 11/30/2006 8:29:02 PM with a score of 0
Pleasant, with nice twists that may or may not hone social skills!
-- Gupse on 11/21/2006 11:20:18 AM with a score of 0
good game bit way too short. next time make it longer
-- havok on 11/13/2006 2:17:36 PM with a score of 0
it was fun, but it was too short.
-- KittenBlue on 11/13/2006 10:40:43 AM with a score of 0
Wow. Nice
-- hamburgerfish on 10/8/2006 5:44:11 PM with a score of 0
Hm, noce dating game. Prolly one of the best, might I add! If it was longer, it'd be perfect, but of course, first games can't be Magus material, if you know what I'm sayin'.
-- Anubis on 10/8/2006 4:09:19 PM with a score of 0
I got Shawna. But uhh...I didn't really think her response was a yes.
-- Deven711 on 10/7/2006 2:36:39 PM with a score of 0
Pretty well written and mildly interesting. Good job for a first story.
-- madglee on 10/6/2006 4:51:02 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was okay.
-- weedy on 10/4/2006 5:01:08 PM with a score of 0
It's fun, and descriptive, but loses points for being too short.
-- SuperHappySmileyFace on 10/3/2006 7:34:38 PM with a score of 0
I won! Kinda short. Work on your future stories and make 'em longer.
-- primates on 10/2/2006 9:09:34 PM with a score of 0
not a bad little adventure. but thats just it, it was too short. now that you have the hang of this make a longer story.
-- Fleshnblood_78 on 10/2/2006 2:33:02 PM with a score of 0
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