It's going down for real

Player Rating1.24/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 38 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

Tags

The Story isn't as Long But it is alittle better.And have fun.

Player Comments

Arrrgghhhhh! WHY i ask WHY is this RATED G!!!!!!!!!!!!!
THIS IS A STORY ABOUT GETTING DRUNK!!! AND THE DESCRITPTION SAYS NOTHING ABOUT IT!!! I dont usally get mad about other people work because i cant usally do much better but-seriousley?!?
1/8 ??????
-- Ginnyweasleybooklove on 8/8/2016 9:25:21 PM
Omg why is rated g?!? I dont want to play a story about getting drunk when i am just a tween! Im like 12 years! Yet thos was rated 4+! One of the only reasons why i didnt quit right away was because i wanted to post this comment!
-- Ginnyweasleybooklove on 8/8/2016 9:18:41 PM
Ey bau5

You can't choke in closets.
-- Swiftstryker on 4/10/2016 6:14:39 AM
I disagree with Mizal and Will11 and think all shit stories should get panned for being, well... shit. Just because you're new doesn't mean you should feel free to slack off and pump out these crap-slogs for the world to see.

Burn it with fire and try again, 1/8.
-- Aducan on 4/10/2016 2:55:20 AM
It was too short, not enough choices, and it had tons of spelling errors. I gave it a 2/8 because it could be a lot better.
-- Shadowgirl _101 on 4/9/2016 9:33:19 PM
I agree with Mizal to an extent that not-great new stories don't deserve immediate abuse but for something to be rated 5/8 it in my opinion requires a length of more than 1/8, spell checked work, more sentences per page, more named characters with personalities, plot development and extensive story branching (there was some plot development but it was sudden and slightly random), properly formatted paragraphs and correct use of grammar or punctuation and freedom from slang, though I suppose depending on the cultural setting and backgrounds of the dialogue this is more ambigous (though I did find Jim made Huckleberry Finn practically unreadable...).

Anyway I think this is a reasonable first effort that deserves higher than a 1/8 but definitely not a 5, I'd average it around a 3/8. Keep writing and work on longer and longer stories and improvement is almost inevitable.
-- Will11 on 4/9/2016 6:52:31 PM
*lurk, lurk* Oh, look, a new storygame! This one must be good!

*after less than a minute of reading* ....

Never mind.

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This storygame was short and didn't have much dialogue, logical sense, or plot. I'd consider unpublishing this and working on it longer than a day.
-- At_Your_Throat on 4/9/2016 4:18:34 PM
It's not perfect, but good try for a newbie. :)

I rated it 5/8. Keep writing more like this!

P.S. Just ignore all the trolls.
-- mizal on 4/9/2016 2:42:00 PM
This is so shitty, that I don't even have the time or effort to use my own words. This is so shitty, it doesn't even deserve its own proper review, so here's a segment of another review for something that isn't even as shitty as this, because it gets the point across without me having to expend the effort of something as fucking stupidly shitty as this goddamn game.

http://www.tubechop.com/watch/7866954
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 4/9/2016 1:17:48 PM
Congratulations, you managed to violate several laws of science and logic in just a few short pages. Well done.
-- Bucky on 4/9/2016 11:10:27 AM
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