Kirthia: Foundations

Player Rating5.88/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 21 ratings since 12/31/2017
played 167 times (finished 22)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
Kirthians are species with simple needs. (Humans of the future sometimes refer to them as 'stone aged hobbits who breed like rabbits and don't belong in space, damn them'.)

Early kirthians mostly just wanted to be well fed in a comfortable mud hut, and spread their offspring as far as possible across their world without too many coming to grief from the planet's many large and voracious predators.

Then, the Altora came from their tunnels of fire...

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I wasn't logged in when I made that comment, so I hope you don't mind me posting it twice.

This was a nice treat. Obviously it was a bit shorter than I would like, but that doesn't take away too terribly much.

Of the entries I've read thus far, this is the one I've had the least problems with. Not any problems that I can think of at all, aside from length, and that criticism is barely one at all seeing as how you: were also trying to meet your six stories deadline, and how this was a contest entry. It also eases my mind knowing that you'll be adding around triple the content to this.

All in all, a good contest entry.
-- EbonVasilis on 1/11/2018 12:17:07 PM with a score of 0
This was a nice treat. Obviously it was a bit shorter than I would like, but that doesn't take away too terribly much.

Of the entries I've read thus far, this is the one I've had the least problems with. Not any problems that I can think of at all, aside from length, and that criticism is barely one at all seeing as how you: were also trying to meet your six stories deadline, and how this was a contest entry. It also eases my mind knowing that you'll be adding around triple the content to this.

All in all, a good contest entry.
-- EbonVasilis on 1/11/2018 12:02:57 PM with a score of 0
So in the end the Kirthia are able to achieve space travel and settle on other planets?
-- Qqquuuessstion on 1/5/2018 6:05:27 PM with a score of 0
Very enjoyable! Did you do the cover art yourself? I have to say, you have a very interesting art style! I'd love to see that in some form of animated television series, but, alas, 'tis only a dream.

Anyways, good story. It's a bit too open, as in, not much of a concrete plot, but it's clear you weren't intending to write a story-focused CYOA but instead more of a choice-focused CYOA, as many authors seem to prefer.
-- Comply on 12/31/2017 7:12:29 PM with a score of 0
Very well written, I enjoyed the balance of narrative pace and detailed description.
To be honest, I think it could have done with fewer "foreign" words, because while they can be utilised to great comical effect, they can also disrupt the narrative flow in places.
-- llImperatorll on 12/31/2017 4:37:00 PM with a score of 0
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