Player Comments on Math and Poetry - The Great Adventure

I think this was well written, even if it was very short. I don't understand why you tell people to comment on the blog rather than here. After all, you did share it on this website. And you never mentioned what blog, so that people can comment there?!? Anyways, the grammar and spelling looked fine. But I think you could have improved the story somewhat. Who goes on a roadtrip with a destination that is only an hour away and packs for the trip? Why would they get a hotel instead of just driving home? Perhaps the destination should have been further away? This was an interesting concept, though. I've actually combined math and poetry before for one of my lessons a long time ago. I liked it! Congrats, and I hope to see you elaborate on this story or perhaps write another story. :)

I feel like this was a quirky little philosophy parable. The idea is certainly new, since I've never though of Math and Poetry as anthropomorphic beings that go on road trips together, but I did enjoy their characterizations and their dialogue, since there was always a meta-level that commented on the nature of those two subjects instead of those two characters in the story.

However, as interesting of an intellectual exercise that reading this may have been, it was very, very short for a storygame with a rather tepid plot. Granted, it was well written with excellent spelling and grammar, but I think only a very small audience will find the plot and the characters compelling due to the simple fact that this story game is mostly a commentary about the similarities and differences of two intangible concepts.

Short and not particularly immersive, but it was well written and the concept itself was very interesting.

Interesting, very interesting. Just on the originality of the premise I think this should be rated higher :)