Player Comments on McDonald's Adventure!

This made me laugh, but it has many flaws, but many good things about it as well :)

I don't like how one of the first choices can kill you, and I don't really enjoy the lolrandom choices (they're a bit annoying and odd), but I guess that was the type of humor you used for this storygame. However, when used too much, lolrandom humor isn't funny. It just gets annoying.

I did like the writing style, and you have potential. If you'd included more detail and character development, I would have rated it higher.

Speaking of character development, I noticed little to no development for the characters. I don't feel anything for them. Even in humor stories, you need to have emotion, and remember that it doesn't have to be cheesy, serious emotion :)

It was very creative, and decently fleshed out. Honestly, it's the best storygame about McDonalds i've ever read!

I enjoyed the plot, but more development and a more clear setting would have been nice.

Overall, I did like it but you've got a lot to work on. 3/8, good job I guess.

Here is another example of an odd, yet creative story on this site!

I'm not going to be soo critisive on this one as others of its kind which are usually more low-ranking and deserve some sort of advice. Because mainly, I didn't really find anything wrong with it.

The grammar and writing could have been a little worked on, obviously. The plot could have been more streetched, with some more options/destinations.

It was fun trying out everything.

5/8.

The basic story seemed to be looking good. I selected it because it seemed short and seemingly funny. Yes. So I thank the author for putting so many twisted choices, but I didn't like some things. Humor, already. The orphan's blow made me laugh, but I didn't like the rest. And, prolematic, Girls can also play this story, so please do not call us perverts when we go to the bathroom... I still put a 4/8 for the Theme

funny, not much else

Uhhh ok.

Well, I should of expected as much.
Right?

Let’s start at the beginning shall we? So I went into the story for a quick look, just pass 10 minutes or so.You know, the usual.I was guessing it was gonna be random, but damn.

You.Over.Did.It.
Orphan Meat(Dark Humor:check)
Grab her boobs in panic(Just Weird:check)

Having a choice to go into the girls bathroom(Perviness:check)
Over 9000 nuggets(Anime Meme:check)
Having the choice to eat money(Randomness:check)

Moans coming from the bathroom(Bathroom Cliche:check)
Apparently dying from a disease at random(CYOA Cliche:check)
Narrator killing you for picking a choice(100 Year Old Cliche:check)

I could go on, but then I would feel like a bad person.I can’t contemplate how you made this so random.Your Mindset?
Now if you know my reading style, I love randomness, it’s fun and makes it
so you never know what’s around the corner.

But because your story was so small(Small dick in story reference:check) and linear you didn’t really get the good side of a good random story.You just got the memes,dark humor and hopeless clichés.That have been lost to time (To many clichés cliché:check)

I’m not sure if this is just a random story you did to be funny with cringy jokes so bad their good, but I would of hoped you took pride in your work.I love randomness but you made me overdose on what I love so 3/8, okay effort, bad jokes, pervy choices, and a narrator who killed me cause I wanted to see 1 choice.

WHERE THE HELL IS FARM ADVENTURE?!

Great game bud. Much wow.

I can't believe you also wrote Seasons Change...
This was quite funny, I must admit. I ate the money.

THIS MADE MY DAY ??

Sunshine and Rainbows :D
7/8

lol, i ate the money

Yay I read the real end.

ha, the whole ordeal with the family, anyways XD, 7/8

end is amazing

Messed up.

Dumb.

Very satirical, I love it.

Genuinely amusing.

A tiny bit freaky.......

This story, while very disturbing, was pretty funny. The amount of interactions that you can choose from are aplenty.

I'm sorry but you wouldn't even give us the option of being girls in the girls bathroom.....you automatically assumed we were all guys who play this game. Other than that, it was interesting in some places.

Ok........

best game ever !!!!!!!!!!!!!! : )

funny as shit.

Good for a laugh. :)

Fun, silly humour without crossing being so random it's just plain stupid. 6/8

HILARIOUS

F*** YES. This has been my favorite game so far. One, I think it actually should be rated 6, but it was still awesome.
Also, is farm adventure a legit thing?

Omfg this made my life 10x better XD

this game is crazy, I loved it

I am enlightened.

GROSS DUDE!!

Loool so funny :D

....what even? In all seriousness, definitely good for some laughs. :)

This was hilarious. Well done. The grammar is very good also.

Yay! Sunshine and rainbows!! *rides away on alicorn* WHHEEEE!!!

I bet the lezz part was a parallel to your other storygame, had she not jumped and went to the McD's instead. XD

It was pretty funny, but short. But meh, it is your furst game, so I'm pretty impressed.

Oh wow! Language people! Seriously!

Funny.
5/8

Really weird!

Bathroom scene gave me a good laugh xD 6/8

I hated my death! The game was good, but why would you shoot yourself just because you couldn't decide how many McNuggets you want?!

Wasn't good, wasn't bad...

The maturity level is wrong, it should be rated R-17 for the language. I don't...love this story, but it's not...bad either. Kind of reminds me of EndMaster's games.