On The Road...

Player Rating3.91/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 25 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

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Sorry if its kind of short. It's my first, and probably will be the only one in a while. So...anything to make it better?

 

Player Comments

This is a good story, I hope you keep writing more.
I like the part "you see a corpse beside you, dead." Ordinarily I'd say that since a corpse is a dead body by definition, that you don't need to tell us it's dead. But when I thought about it, at least I knew it wasn't a zombie. Good story.
-- corgi213 on 11/3/2015 10:31:46 PM
It's good enough, but a bit on the short side.
Grammar was alright, with a few mistakes here and there, but nothing major.
The plot of the story is enough to keep the reader interested for long enough. I was suprised by the amount of choices given to me, and the sentances were written well.
4/8, It's worth to be read at least once.
-- Ronhil12 on 10/30/2015 6:29:40 AM
Pretty entertaining story, reminded me of a traveler's first night on his adventure in a much larger story. Felt like it could have been expanded upon if you choose to stay in the inn, but it could be larger in the other paths (which I have yet to investigate). 4/8
-- Chris113022 on 10/30/2015 1:07:09 AM
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