Player Comments on Paraplaniac > ChooseYourStory.com

Hm, wow.. It was f*ckin' awesome! It's one of the first storygames in a long time that actually held my attention longer then a few pages. I don't wanna give it away for anyone who's not played it yet, but I liked the story and worlds in general. I especially liked how it all turned out... Kinda reminded me of Buddhism for some reason. Though, honestly, I thought that the master was some sorta pedophile. :D 8/8

— Zero on 7/11/2008 5:19:39 PM with a score of 1

Great story, very creative with excellent descriptions and clean writing. You created your own mythology within; possibly inspired by a certain film, it stands wonderfully on its own. I'd love to know how much the stats were changing the outcomes of certain things - the battles were fun and not annoying in the least and I would have liked to see a few more. Looking forward to, and hoping for, a sequel. This is one of, and perhaps your best, work on the site. Writing has improved dramatically - great work triple J!

— madglee on 7/11/2008 2:06:31 AM with a score of 1

Entertaining! Though not your best work. It was pretty linear, except for the battle sequences which were dynamic. I think keeping the plot a mystery was very effective, however the tone or voice used felt more like it was a movie and less like a story. I don't know yet if that is a good or bad thing, since I watched the movie Jumper just two days ago :P
Anyways, good job!

— solostrike on 7/9/2008 1:51:18 PM with a score of 1

Kinda dull and boring

— Kuro on 4/7/2019 1:39:02 PM with a score of 1

Well.. I like it but the writing is a bit childish

— uri on 9/30/2018 2:20:47 PM with a score of 1

Excessive, ugly prose eats away at the already predictable plot. What could have been an interesting story ends up feeling "meh".

Teen 3J definitely needed to analyze more professional writers.

— 3iguy on 8/1/2018 11:06:40 PM with a score of -1

Awesome story

— David on 4/3/2018 12:20:43 AM with a score of 1

Interesting

— LukeBlaze on 12/18/2017 4:29:30 AM with a score of 1

Great story! I really wish it was longer, but for what it's worth, it's awesome. It really kept my attention the whole time. You should definitely expand the story a bit!

— nm13757 on 9/22/2017 7:42:14 PM with a score of 1

Two surprise ending. Quite a nice game actually. =)

— TestingJest on 9/21/2017 9:22:10 PM with a score of 1

It was a ok story overall

— The Player on 12/13/2016 2:56:53 PM with a score of 1

VERY, VERY SHORT.

— BigRonn77 on 7/7/2016 11:47:37 AM with a score of 1

Cool game.

— crusader on 6/12/2016 3:33:56 PM with a score of -1

i gave you a not the best rating, bcuz u, 3j, were writing it. Anyone else and it would've gotten 7 or 8. Its too short for you bro.

— Nidsalim on 2/12/2016 8:49:22 AM with a score of 1

Exceptional. This is the ideal use of the storygame format. Stat systems often have a tendency to make the experience far more game than story, but in this instance JJJ utilized it perfectly to enhance the story.
It is pleasantly challenging. It is not easy to succeed, and the reader has to think (and probably retrace their steps) to progress.
This is a bold, imaginative, and exceedingly clever plot. With minimal exposition JJJ immerses the reader in a fascinating well-imagined universe. Perhaps the setting could have been better developed with the use of more details (not necessarily exposition, but description). Though it is brief, it is dense with imagination. It could have been extended longer as well, as the reader is just beginning to feel at home in the exciting imaginary world when the story comes to an end.
8/8. I am extremely impressed.
Cheers, JJJ-thebanisher

— dueconsideration on 9/12/2015 5:59:49 PM with a score of 1

I've read most of your stories by now, and every one of them has me wondering, what happens next? That's when you know you are a good writer.

— DeathWhisperer on 9/6/2015 4:00:40 PM with a score of 1

Wicked good buddy!

— Shadow_Strider on 7/29/2015 12:37:09 AM with a score of 1

Awesome story,but short rather linear but lots of one-page deadends.

— Arthe6351 on 6/29/2015 12:44:35 PM with a score of 1

fun

— shadonai on 5/22/2015 4:03:48 PM with a score of 1

Nice game, I got the best ending!

— Shinobi on 2/11/2015 12:03:48 AM with a score of 1

#get wreked i won without even trying holeh crup broke his wrists then wiped him from existence..... Sweg

— O.O on 1/27/2015 4:56:15 PM with a score of 1

Well it's not the worse, but did seem a bit like the Matrix overloaded in some ways.

Still the dimensional shifting moves were a nice touch.

— TylerDanann on 11/19/2014 1:58:49 PM with a score of 1

meh, I feel like it was a little bit on the short side, and that the main character gets that random convenient power up with no explanation.

However the fighting was really cool though, could be a good model for a future story.

— Tangecide on 10/13/2014 4:14:39 PM with a score of 1

i killed delta x? God damm it! 8/8.

— tiras on 9/29/2014 12:15:12 PM with a score of 1

Awesome!!!

— bluejay14 on 8/18/2014 10:58:02 PM with a score of 1

Lots of fun and very interesting. Almost no spelling errors and engages from the start. Great job!

— TheSophia on 7/29/2014 3:15:06 AM with a score of 1

wow.... it was good but its kinda dum to make u pay fer a website that i thought was free

— jason on 7/1/2014 4:20:55 PM with a score of 1

This game really is cool. I like it.

— qatar on 4/22/2014 9:03:32 PM with a score of -1

It's okay. The premise seemed interesting but was a little hard to follow. The arch was barely dramatic. There is little character development if at all. This probably would have been a better story if it were longer and had more plot development.

— Spacecats on 2/9/2014 9:14:36 PM with a score of 1

took e a while to get my head around the different planes of existence but after that it was amazing. The only thing wrong with it was that it felt like it ended just when things were kicking off

— Wilko19 on 12/31/2013 7:59:00 PM with a score of 1

It's a good game.

— lucas on 12/1/2013 12:45:02 PM with a score of 1

Wow, All i can say... Wow.

— Zandarious on 10/31/2013 6:05:13 PM with a score of 1

i feel like this had so much potential and was a brilliant idea, but the ending was so lame. there really wasn't much of a character arch. it felt like the creator was excited at the beginning but then just wanted to finish it quickly.

— candace on 5/23/2013 2:33:53 AM with a score of 1

The Game was Amazing! 8/8!
But it was too short :/

— Dreknauo on 3/17/2013 4:46:54 AM with a score of 1

It was unforgivably short game for it's quality, why the best ones are so short!

I hope you make a sequel, a prequel or another game set in the same universe, I really liked the story :(

— Miguelinileugim on 3/16/2013 4:30:25 PM with a score of 1

The only downside I find about this story is the ending, which is a bit unsatisfying. Otherwise, it's quite good. I don't usually rate good but this was a clear 7/8, mostly because of the interesting plot but the writing wasn't bad either.

— Tgetruegamer on 2/13/2013 7:49:59 AM with a score of 1

Amazing Story, I love the fact you used matrix and jumper to such a degree. I wish this was longer though and that there was development between Tiras and Sarit.

Other than that, Awesome.

— SilverFlame1995 on 2/3/2013 1:03:14 PM with a score of 1

Pretty awesome game! Very imaginative and interesting.

— Gmmcghee on 1/17/2013 3:36:16 PM with a score of 1

it could be longer

— fartfacesda on 1/17/2013 1:26:31 PM with a score of 1

That was awesome. I loved that twist, and the way you made the characters have such distinct personalities. It was intense

— GuitarWarlock on 9/16/2012 11:10:21 PM with a score of 1

Pretty good not very long

— jwwhoops on 9/2/2012 9:12:38 PM with a score of 1

I thought it was supposed to give me a number at the end? My ending (i think the perfect one) simply said "the end," no number :/

— Spellslinger on 8/12/2012 9:35:43 PM with a score of 1

Great one with perfect choices!

— RobustSporadic on 7/22/2012 7:09:18 AM with a score of -1

Nice

— Haha on 6/11/2012 2:58:27 AM with a score of 1

i won. I wish i had the choice to not kill my brother though

— bells23 on 4/19/2012 3:08:19 PM with a score of 1

Great writing and gamePlay but some pages are confusing

— Xt1000305 on 4/16/2012 10:00:20 PM with a score of 1

I wish it wasn't so short and the story was developed more overall a bit disappointing.

— CovElite on 3/21/2012 10:47:49 PM with a score of 1

Really nifty setting :)

— BerkaZerka on 2/6/2012 12:56:04 PM with a score of 1

Interesting game.

— bravetheheat on 1/30/2012 12:17:46 AM with a score of 1

Awesome game

— NinaB.R. on 12/31/2011 11:33:27 PM with a score of 1

Pretty good

— Rialla514 on 12/15/2011 11:16:25 PM with a score of 1

Quite a fun game, but not an in-depth story. It won't give you that "enlightment" unlike stories similar to Eternal. It still is really good.

— Swiftstryker on 11/28/2011 8:30:23 PM with a score of 1

Great story!

— joshdragon on 9/10/2011 5:30:12 PM with a score of 1

that was amazing! i can see why this is in the top five! the only thing i didn't understand was how he killed his brother. how did he kill his brother?!?!?

— SEULaw on 9/2/2011 4:47:50 AM with a score of 1

Nice, story JJJ.

— cool74 on 6/4/2011 5:13:51 PM with a score of 1

Lol Madglee reference. Bo approves

— ThisisBo on 5/14/2011 10:07:10 AM with a score of 1

Very interesting story

— Jon on 3/19/2011 11:55:01 PM with a score of 1

It is a game worthwhile. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

— Crefix on 12/15/2010 4:32:12 AM with a score of 1

This was a very unique and interesting story, well done!

— TheWriter on 10/13/2010 11:10:35 PM with a score of 1

I am a winner! I think that actually should be a 6 rating but it was a great story and I did it first try

— doodoodude on 9/26/2010 11:16:04 PM with a score of 1

Beat it. Great game! Better than a 6, but I'd say it ties with Reeses. (Or in JFP's case, chocoball)

— Jeff on 8/9/2010 6:43:11 PM with a score of -1

Excellent story, you definitely can see the inspirations of "The Matrix" and such but in a good way. I'd personally love to see a sequel, or atleast a story set in the same universe.

— H-A-V-O-K on 6/18/2010 11:28:38 PM with a score of 1

Seven. Pretty good, I dunno if it's better than a Resses cup, cause those are absolutely amazing.

— Rozeline on 12/28/2009 2:45:08 PM with a score of 1

Pretty good :)

— demonstar31 on 12/4/2009 10:04:17 AM with a score of 1

grate story!! but thers to one part cuting it prety close to losing all ya paraplanic

— miller100 on 8/30/2009 4:35:07 PM with a score of -1

That took forever

— checker444 on 4/10/2009 2:26:24 PM with a score of -1

Oi, aweseome game!

— Ampkit on 9/17/2008 8:32:42 AM with a score of -1

it was coo.

— fenwickb on 8/12/2008 9:46:07 PM with a score of 1

Great Story, Loved it.

— Jimson on 8/6/2008 2:25:58 AM with a score of 1

Great storygame. Your customary skill at combat scenes is evident.

— Sethaniel on 7/11/2008 1:47:34 PM with a score of 1

Definitely one of the best stories on the site. It wasn't as long as some other stories, and it could have been slightly longer, but the doesn't bring it down too much. There were a few grammatical errors here and there but - hell- who cares? Excellent job, JJJ.
7/8 (Maybe like a 7.5/8)

— Anubis on 7/10/2008 12:42:40 PM with a score of -1

It's very good, I'll say that. A nice storyline, good (yet slightly graphic) battle sequences and a decent gameplay. The problem is that it is too linear. A brilliant story, nonetheless, but if you don't take the one path you die. But seriously, make this a little longer and you could turn it into an actual novel or something. Or create alternate paths, extend it a bit. It's got potential, and was fun to read, but you've wasted how good it could have been by making the plot move so quickly. Don't get me wrong, it's good, better than most things, I'm not disappointed that it's bad (which it isn't), I'm disappointed that it could have been even better than that.

But good work, another good storygame and I'm liking it lots.

— October on 7/9/2008 10:05:18 PM with a score of 1

A very original story that was well made and easily navigated, with a variety of decisions. Will have to play it again soon to see the extent of what you've created here. Thanks JJJ!

— march5th00 on 7/9/2008 6:09:11 PM with a score of 1

SWEET! great story, I think I got the best ending, and it was awesome. Great explainations of mysteries in this world andd great story all around

— th*mage*of*kings on 7/9/2008 11:08:32 AM with a score of 1

Very unique and interesting premise for a parallel universe story. I thoroughly enjoyed this story.

— DieDaily on 7/9/2008 1:14:20 AM with a score of 1