Puppet without strings

Player Rating4.73/8

"#216 overall, #2 for 2010"
based on 100 ratings since 07/13/2010
played 1,825 times (finished 111)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a SnickersĀ®"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

It's XXIII century, humankind has long ago reached stars. But it's not golden age. Space is harsh master and so we become like it - cold, ruthless and effective. New society was created, new kind of people. Like anthill all we have are our roles to fulfill. Nothing more.

You are one of the War Marionettes - brainwashed humans with technical upgrades who are bound to obey every order of their masters. 'Normal' people call you 'puppets'. Still, you are very special kind of puppet - experimental model. And your foreboding name is Thirteen...

Hint:

*ALWAYS first collect items as some of them are needed for game to function properly

*this is a first part of a series, I may be writing more soon

* and yes - you can get killed here pretty quickly...

Player Comments

Really cool story idea. I enjoyed it a lot, even if the grammar was a little bad. I'm guessing English is your second language, so well done.
-- October on 3/28/2011 7:22:47 AM with a score of 0
Your storyline is really well thought out and awesome. Your execution is poor because the writing is incoherent. You're missing words and your grammar is terrible. Is English your second language? If so, this is an absolutely awesome story. I gave it a 5 because I really love the storyline. Just as a side note, I don't think this is long enough to warrant splitting it off into a sequel. Generally, as a rule of thumb, a story should be about 200 pages long before that's even thought of.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 8/9/2010 6:54:44 PM with a score of 0
I really liked the concept and storyline. My main complaint would be general mistakes in grammar and writing style. Still, I had fun reading this story and I hope you make other parts to it.
-- Utopia on 7/18/2010 2:35:29 PM with a score of 0
I really enjoy the premise to your story, and it's surprisingly well written for someone to whom English is a second language. Next time, you might consider working with someone else on the site who can edit it for you, to help make the story work as best as it can in English. Other than that, I just wish it was longer because I really enjoyed it but it was over too quick.
-- Glandros on 12/10/2017 2:29:26 PM with a score of 0
Overall, it had a few errors but I loved the story line.

7/8
-- Snowflame on 4/9/2017 9:14:54 PM with a score of 0
Definitely a good story.
-- lolitup4 on 3/30/2016 3:23:39 PM with a score of 0
I want a sequel please. :D
-- Isambard on 10/5/2015 12:00:38 PM with a score of 0
I really liked it. Has a nice plot and storyline looking foward to next installment. Spelling was a bit off but not horribly.
-- hugo23 on 3/29/2013 2:32:14 AM with a score of 0
Twas good but it needs some corrections in the grammar.
-- SomeDude on 1/25/2013 10:19:04 AM with a score of 0
Loved the story. 6/8
-- Xt1000305 on 11/18/2012 10:11:44 PM with a score of 0
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