Player Comments on School and Cool

This was a very cute little game.and the plot wasn't that bad I'm going to see if there anymore endings but I just appreciate that I don't have to fear some unrealistic and gory death from an option.it was a little rushed but I appreciate the effort and time you put into it.(and also don't take comments too personally.peoples comments are often influencd by others and people become more judge mentol online.just remember to only focus on constructive criticism because people who be offensive are not the people you should take advice from.)good luck on your next story if you do one.

Cool game!

To begin with: I actually rather liked this story! (in response to the comment at the end)

Good: A lot of things that are actually VERY uncommon on CYS
NO grammar mistakes
An actual PLOT
Lots of options and endings

Bad: Very few (one)
Slightly unrealistic. You just walked up to Warner and he liked you? But sometimes I need a happy ending, so congrats! Loved your story! 6/8

Great make more just like it

I really wished there were more options. If I have a phone and Warner also has a phone, why can't I just call/text him to see which restaurant we're going to?
Who is Beth?? Why does she matter at all?
Why can't I date Caitlyn?

Choose Freddy to be your boyfriend

This Stroy Is Pretty Good. A little bit cliche but good I had a fun time with it. The only thing I can find wrong with it is that it,s a little short maybe edit to add more choices. I know this could take a long time to make so maybe I could help or give suggestions. I provided my email so If you want me to give you some suggestions on how to make the story longer and meaningful choices. I give this story 6/8 becuase Nothing is better Than Resse cups

It's good!

it was realy good

Pretty good

Cool
Really cool
Great
Really great

Its good

This was awesome, especially if you only have like 10 min to play.

The story was extremely linear. Sure, it would have diverging choices here or there, but after one or two pages, they'd all return to the same plot line.
There were also oddly random selections that you used, and each page was rather short. Not a lot to read. You were vague about things that weren't cat related. The grammar, however, was very good, and didn't leave me cringing halfway through the story.
I recommend that you try a bit harder at your next work, putting more thought, detail and love into it, as well as a non-linear story line.
Regardless of the cons I mention, I think you show promising potential, and if you really just try, you'll be guaranteed to do better next time!

I married a dragon.

This is really fun!

It's Fun!

this was really cool!!! I loved it!!

I really like your story, Cute!

Replayed, annnnd.... best ending EVER!

Hilarious... slay a dragon, what? Gunna replay now... I thought it was a vid. game!

Cute, light reading. I would imagine it's hard to "fail" it. Grammatical errors make the reading difficult in places, esp. towards the end. Nice story. :)

This was a pretty cool and enjoyable storygame :)

this story was ok, pretty good plot, but boring-ish ending. ANd kinda short. Still enjoyed it tho!

That was great!!

Amazing

I got what I think was the best ending tbh ;) I got the cool blonde guy for a be and had friends with the cheerleader girl and her friends :33

I really liked it! Especially the parts where you got to pick your outfit and how to do your hair. It was really fun and I liked the types of choices you got to make.

It was not particularly interesting. The game didn't provide a challenge for getting a boyfriend or getting friends. Perhaps I would have enjoyed it more if befriending people and getting a boyfriend was more of a challenge, but all it involved was clicking a few links.

Automatic subtraction for 'a hipster-ish outfit'. This was a good waste of time, but nothing more.

This was alright, you should have had more of the dating thing and extended the story and how big each page was.

a pretty awesome game

Okay, I made this when I was ten and had no idea people still looked at this! I find it funny how the Y/N thing was a total hit-or-miss.. You see, I was really into "One Direction" at the time and that's the way they wrote your name in The Fanfictions. Thank you everyone who gave this old story a positive rating, and to that one negative Nancy A few below me who "docked" my rating my a point, I was literally ten years old. You're lucky I wasn't writing about Barbie Dolls. ??

cute story and i don't mind the y/n at all i like it thanks (:

that was good I love it

The YN thing wasn't "realistic ". At all. I docked you a point from my already low rating for that.

I know what you mean! I just finished my first story before, and it was so short, which I didn't realise till the end because it took me two dats to write the thing, and trying to put it in different directions.. Nightmare! But every positive comment I got light up my face. Gosh, didn't mean to make it all about me haha! Sorry! I don't know how long ago you wrote this, but for a first story I loved it, nicely written and comedic. Awesome!

Definitley fun! I like how the different options actually sound realistic. Very good work for a first story.

You flip open your old phone (Which is indestructable no matter how hard you try to break it!)
Its so Random! Is it Nokia 3310? XD

Magnificent!

... Um... okay?

I personally liked this story. It was pretty interesting and there were many different decisions you could make that changed the course of the story. I even liked the random "Slay A Dragon" option as well! While I rate this a 6/8, I think the passages could have been a bit longer and have a few more details. Other than that, I had a pretty good time playing this story! :)

I actually really enjoyed this! It was short and to the point, but was fun and easy to navigate :) y/n didn't bother me at all either so I don't know what everyone was fussing about. Xx

It's actually not that bad!
I kind of like your story
keep it up!
5/8

Yay!I didn't get a boyfriend. But then its END?weird but ok since its not so much about dating...

AWESOME~Ducky

Really great story! It was realistic.

The name of your character was weird. Other than that it was pretty good, I noticed one spelling error, but that didn't effect my view of it as a pretty good game and an excellent first one.

two thing one why was she crying about a 79 thats not bad? second why was my character named Y/N you could have atleast given it a generic unisex name like sam or corey.

you could of had at least put in a generic name instead of y/n. some of the outcomes are too random, like fighting the dragon. if you are going for random go as deep as possible like in my story/game randomness. this was meant to be a romance/life kind of story, but the randomness kinda got me sidetracked and took focus away from the main plot.

Only one major problem I had with the story was the fact that there was no character name. I'd much rather you type in some random name instead of Y/N.

I did enjoy it, and felt it did better then other school based games. Great job on your first story. :)

... good game some randomness and what's up with the name Y/N?